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Do You Agree Or Disagree With The Following Statement? Large cities should ban cars from the city center. Use Specific Reasons And Examples To Support Your Answer v.283

Large cities should ban cars from the city center. Use Specific Reasons And Examples To Support Your Answer v. 283
Government has many roles and responsibilities to play in the development of a nation and offering better living condition to its citizens. People often tend to contradict whether the primary role of Government is to build its economy or to work on helping the financially weaker people. This essay discusses both the notions and expresses my opinion in the end. On the one hand, a section of people believes that governance should be made to accommodate major contribution to the economic boost. This will keep the country stand among the developed nations and increases the overall value of its products and resources in international market. For example, China has seen a greater rise in its overseas market after investing majorly in the improvement of its economy. Hence, investing most of the country's resources in economics enhances its position globally. On the other hand, there are different sections of people who think that the focus of the members making the governance should be on providing better living condition to the poor people of the state. Since the masses are the backbone of any state, offering good education, health, accommodation and working conditions will improve the overall performance of the country. For instance, Nepal has allocated 75% of its budget to provide better living facilities of its people, which drew the attention of developing nations to start new businesses in that nation. Thus, making efforts in improving the living conditions of underdeveloped sections of people is highly beneficial. To summarize, the two major areas where the administration can be targeted is discussed briefly. In my opinion, the Government should work on balancing both in improvising its economic status and in making the condition of under-developed people better.
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Government
has
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many
roles and responsibilities to play in the development of a
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nation
and offering
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better
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living
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condition
to its citizens.
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People
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often
tend to contradict whether the primary role of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
is to build its economy or to work on helping the
financially
weaker
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people
. This essay discusses both the notions and expresses my opinion in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
.

On the one hand, a section of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believes that governance should
be made
to accommodate major contribution to the economic boost. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the country stand among the developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
and increases the
overall
value of its products and resources in international market.
For example
, China has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
a greater rise in its overseas market after investing
majorly
in the improvement of its economy.
Hence
, investing most of the country's resources in economics enhances its position globally.

On the other hand
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
sections of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the focus of the members making the governance should be on providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
condition
to the poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of the state. Since the masses are the backbone of any state, offering
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
education, health, accommodation and working conditions will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the
overall
performance of the country.
For instance
, Nepal has allocated 75% of its budget to provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
facilities of its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, which drew the attention of developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
new businesses in that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
.
Thus
, making efforts in improving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
conditions of underdeveloped sections of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
is
highly
beneficial.

To summarize
, the two major areas where the administration can
be targeted
is discussed
briefly
. In my opinion, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should work on balancing both in improvising its economic status and in making the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
condition
of under-developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Large cities should ban cars from the city center. Use Specific Reasons And Examples To Support Your Answer v. 283

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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