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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher. v.267

A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher. v. 267
Some countries do not have access to certain fruits and vegetables during a certain time of the year and so decide to import them through air transport. It is thought by some that this means of transportation is justified while others disagree. In this essay, I will discuss both views and explain my support for the latter view. On the one hand, people that believe that transporting agricultural produce through air transport argue that it is a fast means of delivering the products. This is particularly important for perishable goods that have very short shelf life. Shipping such products or transporting them by road may get them damaged before getting to their final destination. Although farmers have become inventive on preservation techniques to keep such items, fresh for the desired duration. Also, air travel is considered to be one of the safest means of transportation as there is minimal risk of robbery attack. On the other hand, some people argue that transporting fruits and vegetables by air is unjustified and I agree. Firstly, air haulage is the most expensive means of transporting goods. This additional cost would be transferred to the final consumer and would therefore make them unaffordable for most people. Secondly, Airplanes are known to emit a lot of carbon monoxide to the atmosphere. This not only pollute the air that we breathe in, but also contributes more to the global warming issues that is already being contended with. Lastly, because of the level of turbulence that is sometimes experienced during air travel, perishable goods, like tomatoes, that are not properly packaged might get damaged before being delivered to their final destination. In conclusion, despite the considerably faster time to delivery offered by air transportation, the environmental issues it creates are enormous. Countries that do not have the right soil to support growth of certain fruits should consider scientific ways of overcoming these barriers rather than transporting by air from other regions.
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countries do not have access to certain fruits and vegetables during a certain time of the year and
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so
decide to import them through
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air
transport. It is
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thought
by
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some
that this
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means
of transportation
is justified
while others disagree. In this essay, I will discuss both views and
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explain
my support for the latter view.

On the one hand,
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people
that believe that
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transporting
agricultural produce through
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air
transport argue that it is a
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fast
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means
of delivering the products. This is
particularly
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important
for perishable
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goods
that have
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very
short shelf life. Shipping such products or
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transporting
them by road may
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get
them damaged
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before
getting to their final destination. Although farmers have become inventive on preservation techniques to
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keep
such items, fresh for the desired duration.
Also
,
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air
travel
is considered
to be one of the safest
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means
of transportation as there is minimal
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risk
of robbery attack.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
argue that
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transporting
fruits and vegetables by
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air
is unjustified
and I
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agree
.
Firstly
,
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air
haulage is the most expensive
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means
of
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transporting
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goods
. This additional cost would
be transferred
to the final consumer and would
therefore
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make
them unaffordable for most
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people
.
Secondly
, Airplanes
are known
to emit
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a lot of
carbon monoxide to the atmosphere. This not
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only
pollute the
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air
that we breathe in,
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but
also
contributes more to the global warming issues
that is
already
being contended
with.
Lastly
,
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because
of the level of turbulence
that is
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sometimes
experienced during
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air
travel, perishable
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goods
, like tomatoes, that are not
properly
packaged might
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get
damaged
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before
being delivered
to their final destination.

In conclusion
, despite the
considerably
faster time to delivery offered by
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air
transportation, the environmental issues it creates are enormous. Countries that do not have the right soil to support growth of certain fruits should consider scientific ways of overcoming these barriers
rather
than
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transporting
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
from other regions.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher. v. 267

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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