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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better that girls and boys should study in a separate schools. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.263

It is better that girls and boys should study in a separate schools. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 263
In some areas new houses are required, but the only location available for constructing them is the rural areas. Some people think it is more essential to preserve the rural areas and not construct new dwellings there. This easy disagree that it is vital to conserve the countryside and not build new residence there. To begin with, one reason for disagreeing is because of the increase in population. With increasing population in the city centre, there will be limited homes for people to live in. For example, a survey by the Cambridge University found that 5% of the total population in New York City had no place to stay due to lack of accommodations. Nevertheless, if they had a place to live in the city, rising numbers of people in the urban areas would not have been a problem. Additionally, building more houses in the countryside would lead to economic development. Industries would want to move to these places to set up their branch to provide basic needs for the people. For instance, The Sunday Times recently reported that 72% of rural areas experienced economic growth when more houses were built compared to when they were not. Notwithstanding, if they had not experienced growth, constructing new apartment does not correlate with economic growth. In conclusion, due to the important roles accommodations plays for humans and developments, I strongly believe that the countryside should be developed to tackle the increasing challenges faced in the city as a result of limited apartments.
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location available for constructing them is the rural
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people
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it is more essential to preserve the rural
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areas
and not construct
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new
dwellings there. This easy disagree that it is vital to conserve the countryside and not build
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new
residence there.

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with, one reason for disagreeing is
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of the increase in population. With increasing population in the city
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centre
, there will
be limited
homes for
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people
to
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live
in.
For example
, a survey by the Cambridge University found that 5% of the total population in
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New
York City had no place to stay due to lack of accommodations.
Nevertheless
, if they had a place to
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live
in the city, rising numbers of
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people
in the urban
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areas
would not have been a problem.

Additionally
, building more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
in the countryside would lead to economic development. Industries would want to
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move
to these places to set up their branch to provide basic needs for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
For instance
, The Sunday Times recently reported that 72% of rural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
experienced economic growth when more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
were built
compared to when they were not. Notwithstanding, if they had not experienced growth, constructing
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new
apartment does not correlate with economic growth.

In conclusion
, due to the
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important
roles accommodations plays for humans and developments, I
strongly
believe that the countryside should
be developed
to tackle the increasing challenges faced in the city
as a result
of limited apartments.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better that girls and boys should study in a separate schools. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 263

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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