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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and televisionhave more negative effects than positive effects on the way young peoplebehave. v.254

Movies and televisionhave more negative effects than positive effects on the way young peoplebehave. v. 254
Many people think that the death of many languages is not a significant problem, besides it affects their life easier. This essay agrees with this opinion because a few languages are better for the communication and business, and we will have more time to studying and researching in specification knowledge. Initially, the decreasing of a number of languages is a good side effect for the communications and trades since many people can talk about their stories or dealing without a translator. This situation is support international trade and the relationship between each country. For example, in Europe, people can use the English language. So, each country can have a contract to have a free trade and people can travel without visa. In addition, this situation will help student in the world, they need not to learn 3-5 languages to understand the specification knowledge. A lot of time that they have to spend to learn a new language also have an opportunity cost, if all books are published in only one language and all people understand this language too, it will save more time to translate besides, people will have time to focus on the generation, creation and development a new wisdom. For instance, I can speak Thai language, but the Japaness language is very hard for me. Even I understand in economic theories, but I cannot read the other economic book of Japan. The difference of language is a big barrier to my knowledge, and also the other student in Thailand has this problem too. In conclusion, some people opine that the less language is better for life, because it help many people connect together and the global trade receive a benefit from this, moreover, it can reduce the translation time and language barriers for the educational sector. Therefore, this essay opine that is a good effect if we have a fewer language in the world.
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think
that the death of
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many
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languages
is not a significant problem,
besides
it affects their
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life
easier. This essay
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agrees
with this opinion
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because
a few
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languages
are better for the communication and business, and we will have more
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time
to studying and researching in specification knowledge.

Initially
, the decreasing of a number of
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languages
is a
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good
side effect for the communications and
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trades
since
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many
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people
can talk about their stories or dealing without a translator. This situation is support international
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trade
and the relationship between each country.
For example
, in Europe,
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people
can
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use
the English
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language
.
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So
, each country can have a contract to have a free
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trade
and
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people
can travel without visa.

In addition
, this situation will
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help
student in the world, they need not
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to learn
3-5
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languages
to understand the specification knowledge.
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time
that they
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have to
spend to learn a new
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language
also
have an opportunity cost, if all books
are published
in
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only
one
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language
and all
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people
understand this
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language
too, it will save more
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time
to translate
besides
,
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people
will have
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time
to focus on the generation, creation and development
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a new wisdom
.
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, I can speak Thai
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language
,
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but
the
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Japaness
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language
is
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very
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hard
for me. Even I understand in economic theories,
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but
I cannot read the other economic book of Japan. The difference of
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language
is a
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big
barrier to my knowledge, and
also
the other student in Thailand has this problem too.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
opine that the less
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language
is better for life,
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because
it
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help
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many
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people
connect together and the global
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trade
receive a benefit from this,
moreover
, it can
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reduce
the translation
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time
and
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language
barriers for the educational sector.
Therefore
, this essay opine
that is
a
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good
effect if we have a fewer
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language
in the world.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The conquest of learning is achieved through the knowledge of languages.
Roger Bacon

IELTS essay Movies and televisionhave more negative effects than positive effects on the way young peoplebehave. v. 254

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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