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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is time we all relied less on private motor vehicles to get around, and instead used other forms of transport. Use specific examples and details to support your answer. v.208

It is time we all relied less on private motor vehicles to get around, and instead used other forms of transport. Use specific examples and details to support your answer. v. 208
Much attention has been drawn to the extent of damage inflicted on the ecosystem by the manufacturing industry. Taking account of the enormous demand for consumer goods in the current market, I suspect the prime cause of the problem lies in the production system itself. From a personal perspective, the best course of action to solve the issue is therefore to explore alternative materials or more eco-friendly manufacturing techniques. To bring the shortcomings of the production process into sharp focus, it is worth looking at the chemical by-products of the process. Most industrialists labour under a misapprehension that unrestrained economic growth can be achieved without damaging the environment. However, in practice, as more goods are produced, not only has more carbon dioxide being emitted to the air, but more cleaning agents have also leaked into water sources. Moreover, single-use products, most of which are non-biodegradable plastics, have been introduced to accommodate customers’ ever-increasing demands. Discarded easily and being able to remain as wastes for thousands of years, these plastic products find their way into the ocean and threaten marine fauna. Taking those points into consideration, a plausible solution should be striving towards the usage of more environmentally friendly materials. For instance, Starbucks chains have opted for paper or bamboo straws, as well as cups, as a substitution for plastics. If the initial investment and the maintenance cost of the alternatives are high, which oftentimes are the case, governmental promotion, such as tax breaks or financial incentives can go a long way towards developing more sustainable production practices. Businesses making use of renewable sources of energy, for example, can be subsidized by taxpayers, in contrast with those that use nonrenewable sources. In conclusion, the manufacturing sector has taken its toll on the environment due to the concomitant hazardous substances that are subsequently disposed of after the production process. In an attempt to address this issue, going green should be practiced by both the companies and the governments.
Much attention has
been drawn
to the extent of damage inflicted on the ecosystem by the manufacturing industry. Taking account of the enormous demand for consumer
goods
in the
current
market, I suspect the prime cause of the problem lies in the
production
system itself. From a personal perspective, the best course of action to solve the issue is
therefore
to explore alternative materials or more eco-friendly manufacturing techniques.

To bring the shortcomings of the
production
process into sharp focus, it is worth looking at the chemical by-products of the process. Most industrialists
labour
under a misapprehension that unrestrained economic growth can
be achieved
without damaging the environment.
However
, in practice, as more
goods
are produced
, not
only
has more carbon dioxide
being emitted
to the air,
but
more cleaning agents have
also
leaked into water sources.
Moreover
, single-
use
products, most of which are non-biodegradable plastics, have
been introduced
to accommodate customers’ ever-increasing demands. Discarded
easily
and being able to remain as wastes for thousands of years, these plastic products find their way into the ocean and threaten marine fauna.

Taking those points into consideration, a plausible solution should be striving towards the usage of more
environmentally
friendly materials.
For instance
, Starbucks chains have opted for paper or bamboo straws,
as well
as cups, as a substitution for plastics. If the initial investment and the maintenance cost of the alternatives are high, which oftentimes are the case, governmental promotion, such as tax breaks or financial incentives can go a long way towards developing more sustainable
production
practices. Businesses making
use
of renewable sources of energy,
for example
, can
be subsidized
by taxpayers,
in contrast
with those that
use
nonrenewable sources.

In conclusion
, the manufacturing sector has taken its toll on the environment due to the concomitant hazardous substances that are
subsequently
disposed of after the
production
process. In an attempt to address this issue, going green should
be practiced
by both the
companies
and the
governments
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is time we all relied less on private motor vehicles to get around, and instead used other forms of transport. Use specific examples and details to support your answer. v. 208

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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