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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? : “People communicate with each other less than in the pass because of the popularity of television”. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Make sure to use your own words. Do not v.176

: “People communicate with each other less than in the pass because of the popularity of television”. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Make sure to use your own words. Do not v. 176
The aged people want to live in a residential home. In Britain, where nurses can take care of them, but the authority has to pay. Some people believe the family should pay for the care of aged homes and nurses. In my opinion, the government plays a vital rule in providing seniors with a suitable cure and pay for elderly homes. Accordingly, the economic conditions and massive taxes. First and foremost, families have restricted from funding medicines and senior homes because of the economic recession. However, the authority whose a burden for providing Pension after retirement. For example, Egypt's judiciary in 1985 has made a rule for antiquated people supported requirements and houses cost where nurses are responsible for assisting. Although the authority made a law for preserving the older people's rights, the aged people didn't put concentration on health. Second, taxes are constrained by financial power. As a result, the state has accumulated taxes to fund elderly homes such as people who are more than 65 years with all facilities. For instance, Canada has an old town called Courtenay since 1993 have been raising taxes on the employee were difficult to effort, but the workers after retirement have been receiving pensions for lifelong. Furthermore, they have lived comfortably in houses that are establishing for preserving the health and nurses who are responsible for giving a cure and communicating to avoid aged people from isolation. In conclusion, the circumstances these days make it harder for people to finance old people and epic taxes. Even though the development related to seniors happens these days, aged citizens still suffering from loneliness. I agree with authority has a central role in providing old people their needs.
The
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aged
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people
want to
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live
in a residential home. In Britain, where
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nurses
can take care of them,
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but
the
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authority
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has to
pay.
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Some
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people
believe the family should pay for the care of
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aged
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homes
and
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nurses
. In my opinion, the
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government
plays a vital
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rule
in providing seniors with a suitable cure and pay for elderly
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homes
.
Accordingly
, the economic conditions and massive taxes.

First
and foremost, families have restricted from funding medicines and senior
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homes
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because
of the economic recession.
However
, the
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authority
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whose
a burden for providing Pension after retirement.
For example
, Egypt's judiciary in 1985 has made a
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rule
for antiquated
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people
supported requirements and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
cost where
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nurses
are responsible for assisting. Although the
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authority
made a law for preserving the older
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people
's rights, the
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aged
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people
didn't put concentration on health.

Second,
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taxes
are constrained
by financial power.
As a result
, the state has accumulated
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taxes
to fund elderly
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homes
such as
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people
who are more than 65 years with all facilities.
For instance
, Canada has an
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old
town called
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Courtenay
since 1993 have been raising
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taxes
on the employee were difficult to effort,
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but
the workers after retirement have been receiving pensions for lifelong.
Furthermore
, they have
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lived
comfortably
in
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houses
that are establishing for preserving the health and
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nurses
who are responsible for giving a cure and communicating to avoid
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aged
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from isolation.

In conclusion
, the circumstances these days
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make
it harder for
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people
to finance
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old
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people
and epic
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taxes
.
Even though
the development related to seniors happens these days,
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aged
citizens
still
suffering from loneliness. I
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agree
with
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authority
has a central role in providing
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old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
their needs.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay : “People communicate with each other less than in the pass because of the popularity of television”. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Make sure to use your own words. Do not v. 176

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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