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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is never too late for an oldperson to receive higher education and get a university degree. v.131

It is never too late for an oldperson to receive higher education and get a university degree. v. 131
Helping children to act independently and make their own decisions from an early age is important. In my opinion, it is significant to start encouraging children to take their own decisions from the very young age. Of course, it would mean, the children are well educated on the matter before taking any decision. This will not only make them confident, but also empower them with the ability to take mindful decisions, big or small. For example, if there are two toys which a child likes, parents can give him the opportunity to choose one of the two toys. In this way, the child would feel empowered that he had the power to choose. And later, while playing with the toy, he would realise how much fun he's having with it and would feel confident about his choice and decision. Similarly, parents can educate children about healthy and non-healthy food, and then, encourage them to choose their own food. A confident child is not only mentally but emotionally fit as well. In order to realise, if we look at today's world, when there's so much pressure, be it in studies at school or work pressure, it is imperative to be emotionally and mentally strong and confident to stay calm and lead a healthy and successful life. Parents or coaches and teachers need to ensure that children are supplied with sufficient information before they make sound decisions. To conclude, I strongly believe that children need to be emboldened to start taking their own small or big decisions themselves.
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children
to act
independently
and
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make
their
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decisions
from an early age is
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important
.

In my opinion, it is significant to
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start
encouraging
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children
to take their
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own
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decisions
from the
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very
young age.
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, it would mean, the
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children
are
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well educated
on the matter
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before
taking any
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decision
. This will not
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only
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make
them
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confident
,
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but
also
empower them with the ability to take mindful
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decisions
,
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big
or
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small
.

For example
, if there are two toys which a child likes, parents can give him the opportunity to choose one of the two toys. In this way, the child would feel empowered that he had the power to choose. And later, while playing with the toy, he would
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realise
how much fun he's having with it and would feel
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confident
about his choice and
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decision
.
Similarly
, parents can educate
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children
about healthy and non-healthy food, and then, encourage them to choose their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
food.

A
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confident
child is not
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only
mentally
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but
emotionally
fit
as well
. In order to
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realise
, if we look at
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today
's world, when there's
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so
much pressure, be it in studies at school or work pressure, it is imperative to be
emotionally
and mentally strong and
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confident
to stay calm and lead a healthy and successful life.

Parents or coaches and teachers need to ensure that
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children
are supplied
with sufficient information
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before
they
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make
sound decisions.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that
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children
need to
be emboldened
to
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start
taking their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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small
or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
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decisions
themselves.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay It is never too late for an oldperson to receive higher education and get a university degree. v. 131

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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