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Do you agree or disagree that television programs, movies, and video games influence young people's behavior? Give reasons and specific examples to support your claim. v.1

that television programs, movies, and video games influence young people's behavior? Give reasons and specific examples to support your claim. v. 1
In modern society, more and more people using artificial intelligence to drive vehicles. This is due to advancements in technologies and it should be seen as a positive development because it helps people to prevent car accidents. People use artificial intelligence because of the latest development in IA. The automotive software is installed in the car or it can be a brand new automobile that has already that function in it. Intelligence demonstrated by machines can think instead of a human and select an appropriate algorithm to perform the desired request. This algorithm selected by analysing the best effective solutions for driving purposes. A recent study found that by 2030 one third of the population will use IA self-driving cars. Machine intelligence should be welcomed because it is useful for reducing the number of road traffic accidents. We don't need to react quickly in a risky situation to select which way we should turn the steering wheel; the IA device will do it for us. Moreover, these technologies have sensors that are sensitive. Furthermore, a smart brake system will stop the driving, when the chance of crashes another vehicle will be very high. Hence, we will not feel nervous. For example, most of the Tesla drivers state that they feel very comfortable and they have never been in trouble by driving a car. Taking all these points into consideration, a lot of people selecting self-drive automobiles because, the technologies are changing in a good way, which will be a result of the safe driving with fewer road traffic accidents.
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intelligence
to drive vehicles. This is due to advancements in technologies and it should be
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seen
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positive
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helps
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prevent
car accidents.

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People
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use
artificial
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intelligence
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because
of the latest development in IA. The automotive software
is installed
in the car or it can be a
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brand new
automobile that has already that function in it.
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Intelligence
demonstrated by machines can
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think
instead
of a human and select an appropriate algorithm to perform the desired request. This algorithm selected by
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analysing
the best effective solutions for
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driving
purposes. A recent study found that by 2030 one third of the population will
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use
IA self-driving cars.

Machine
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intelligence
should
be welcomed
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because
it is useful for reducing the number of road traffic accidents. We don't need to react
quickly
in a risky situation to select which way we should turn the steering wheel; the IA device will do it for us.
Moreover
, these technologies have sensors that are sensitive.
Furthermore
, a smart brake system will
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stop
the
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driving
, when the chance of crashes another vehicle will be
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very
high.
Hence
, we will not feel nervous.
For example
, most of the Tesla drivers state that they feel
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very
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comfortable and
they have never been in trouble by
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driving
a car.

Taking all these points into consideration,
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a lot of
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people
selecting self-drive automobiles
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because
, the technologies are changing in a
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good
way, which will be a result of the safe
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driving
with fewer road traffic accidents.
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Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay that television programs, movies, and video games influence young people's behavior? Give reasons and specific examples to support your claim. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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