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Do you agree or disagree that “ Poor people have more difficult lives than rich people have"? v.2

that “ Poor people have more difficult lives than rich people have"? v. 2
Having money has a profound role in people' s lives at the present time. The issue that the persons without money have more hardships and difficulties is an undeniable fact. In general, everything in over lives depends on how much money and wealth we have, as a basic and primary budget is an indispensible need for taking any steps. To my perspective, there are several explanations for the having difficulties, and struggles in the real life, which one of them is not being rich. In what follows, I delineate my justifications and put forward my reasons in support of the statement. First and foremost, poor people cannot have convenience as well as the nabob ones have. As a matter of fact, the amount of payment and income are the main factors for having access to the facilities and welfare. Suppose, an individual how can provide and supply the tremendous needs and expenditure of the today' s life such as the house rent, transportation fee, money of clothes and food and so forth. No wonder, the person is bearing too much stress and pressure to meet all requirement of the family. Consequently, the person will definitely confront with extremely cumbersome and arduous situation to land on the earth. Second, destitute populations have more trouble and hardships rather than wealthy people, since taking education and then finding a god job for poor people are not an easy work. Obviously, in the modern time, going to university is a specifically important requisition for being eligible as a job candidate. The veracity of this claim can be readily evaluated by a meticulous observation on a mass of the example; the more educated individuals have being given better chance for a high-payment career, and similarly they can have better and easy lives. to be precise, if a poor person, who don' t come from a rich family, cannot bear the difficulties, he won' t enter the university, which is the only way for having a job and getting rid of more hard days. Last but not least, the wealthy people have more pleasure and leisure time rather than the indigent people. With a close attention, you can ponder and discern that all pleasure and convenience are defined for the rich people. Correspondingly, the live is more entertaining for the powerful and capable persons. Faced with fact, who would go to cinema, theater, and other parties without an appropriate dress, and an acceptable appearance. All in all, with taking all above-mentioned arguments in the considerations, I reiterate that poor people really have more difficulties for making money and keeping their lives nice and quiet rather than the wealthy people.
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Having
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money
has a profound role in
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people&
#039; s
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lives
at the present time. The issue that the
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persons
without
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money
have more hardships and
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difficulties
is an undeniable fact.
In general
, everything in over
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lives
depends on how much
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money
and wealth we have, as a basic and primary budget is an
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indispensible
need for taking any steps. To my perspective, there are several explanations for the
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having
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difficulties
, and struggles in the real life, which one of them is not being rich. In what follows, I delineate my justifications and put forward my reasons in support of the statement.

First
and foremost,
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poor
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people
cannot have convenience
as well
as the nabob ones have. As a matter of fact, the amount of payment and income are the main factors for
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having
access to the facilities and welfare. Suppose, an individual how can provide and supply the tremendous needs and expenditure of the
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today&
#039; s life such as the
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house
rent, transportation fee,
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money
of clothes and food and
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so
forth. No wonder, the
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person
is bearing too much
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stress
and pressure to
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meet
all requirement of the family.
Consequently
, the
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person
will definitely confront with
extremely
cumbersome and arduous situation to land on the earth.

Second, destitute populations have more trouble and hardships
rather
than wealthy
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people
, since taking education and then finding a god job for
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poor
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people
are not an easy work.
Obviously
, in the modern time, going to university is a
specifically
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important
requisition for being eligible as a job candidate. The veracity of this claim can be
readily
evaluated by a meticulous observation on a mass of the example; the more educated individuals have being
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given
better chance for a high-payment career, and
similarly
they can have better and easy
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lives
.
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to
be precise, if a
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poor
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person
, who
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don&
#039; t
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come
from a rich family, cannot bear the
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difficulties
, he
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won&
#039; t enter the university, which is the
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only
way for
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having
a job and getting rid of more
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hard
days.

Last
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but
not least, the wealthy
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people
have more pleasure and leisure time
rather
than the indigent
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people
. With a close attention, you can ponder and discern that all pleasure and convenience
are defined
for the rich
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people
.
Correspondingly
, the
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live
is more entertaining for the powerful and capable
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persons
. Faced with fact, who would go to cinema, theater, and other parties without an appropriate dress, and an acceptable appearance.

All in all, with taking all above-mentioned arguments in the considerations, I reiterate that
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poor
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people
really
have more
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difficulties
for making
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money
and keeping their
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lives
nice and quiet
rather
than the wealthy
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people
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay that “ Poor people have more difficult lives than rich people have"? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
443 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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