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Do you agree or disagree that all students should have an internship during their time at university? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v.2

that all students should have an internship during their time at university? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 2
The university years are very important to develop the personal and professional abilities that will be valuable to the future of a student. Within this scenario, people might discuss whether mandatory internship to all students in college could be a good idea or not. I personally believe that this is a good idea since internships are important to put in practice the knowledge learned in college and also it raises the possibilities to be hired in the market after the end of university years. Knowledge is an essential element to be absorbed in an university. It' s important to learn the subjects that will sustain the professional career of one person in order to become successful in the competitive market. However, it is also paramount to put this knowledge in practice since students need to be able to understand how things work in the market environment while in university. For instance, lawyers office use to hire law students to make internships in their offices. This experience is very important because law students might put in practice what they learned about the judicial and lawyer activities and at the same time students might be valuable interns to law firms since college students also might offer insights to the company. Moreover, a student that made an internship might be considered a person that has a job experience which make these students more attractive to employers. In this sense, an university should develop in their students the importance of this sort of activity, considering they will have a better resumé to present to employers after living college. For example, newspapers have been demonstrating that companies look with better eyes to people who already have some sort of experience in the job environment, which makes students with internships more interesting to the firms raising their possibilities to be hired fast when finished college. At the same time, these students that made internship work tend to be more confident within the work environment since they already know a little how the business related to their field of study works. In conclusion, it' s possible to say that is a good idea that universities oblige their students to make internships during their formation. By this activity students will develop better their knowledge and put it in practice while at the same time they will also be able to be better prepared to the future after leaving college.
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discuss whether mandatory internship to all
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since internships are
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practice
the knowledge learned in college and
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it raises the possibilities to
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in the market after the
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end
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university
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to learn the subjects that will sustain the professional career of one person in order to become successful in the competitive market.
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since
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need to be able to understand how things work in the market environment while in
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students
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internships in their offices. This experience is
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important
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law
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students
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what they learned about the judicial and lawyer activities and at the same time
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students
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be valuable interns to law firms since college
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also
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offer insights to the
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company
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Moreover
, a
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student
that made an internship
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be considered
a person that has a job experience which
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these
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students
more attractive to employers. In this sense,
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should develop in their
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the importance of this sort of activity, considering they will have a
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resumé
to present to employers after living college.
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people
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some
sort of experience in the job environment, which
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students
with internships more interesting to the firms raising their possibilities to
be hired
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when finished college. At the same time, these
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students
that made internship work tend to be more confident within the work environment since they already know a
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little
how the business related to their field of study works.

In conclusion
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that
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universities
oblige their
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students
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make
internships during their formation. By this activity
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will develop
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their knowledge and
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while at the same time they will
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prepared to the future after leaving college.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay that all students should have an internship during their time at university? Use details and examples to support your explanation. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
401 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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