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do you agree or disagree? teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. v.96

teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. v. 96
The question is whether teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn or not. Everyone with regard to cons and pros of this issue and also his private viewpoint can maintain a specific direction toward this idea; however I am willing to affirm that it can have horrible and destructive effects on student' s education, the methods of teaching and social behavior in the class and list goes on. My arguments are listed below which will strengthen my point of view: To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that the teachers play a crucial role in society. Besides teaching or taking exam, their role in social aspects of students' life is undeniable. If we postulate that they will be paid base on students’ score, the circumstance of classes will be changed. For instance, talking about students' favorites, telling joke and creating a joyful condition for students will be unimportant and even worse the teacher may become to apathetic people who looking for more much money. It goes without saying that the ambient of classes will become to a rigid room; consequently students will be frustrated from attending in it. The second reason that I refute this idea lies in the fact that the teachers for receiving more fund, will ignore some activities in the classes. For example, some teachers divide their class to 2 groups and students will be able to participate in teamwork. Spontaneously sharing ability of experiences improves in students’ mental and subsequently students' performance will be raised. As we all know, teamwork usually does not affect on students’ grades; hence it will be removed gradually from education system. It is naturally that when money interferes in anything, people will prefer their own profit. I am going to empower my reasons by following discussion. There are some students who have trouble in learning, so in an ordinary class the teacher spends more time with them. When money enters in story, the teachers will be inclined toward students who learn faster. In fact a bias behavior will be revealed. By taking all above mentioned arguments, this conclusion could be drawn that it is a useless idea and can create a lot of problems in a class. It will be better to teachers are judged base on other things not students' mark.
The question is whether
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teachers
should
be paid
according to how much their
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students
learn or not. Everyone with regard to cons and pros of this issue and
also
his private viewpoint can maintain a specific direction toward this
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idea
;
however
I am willing to affirm that it can have horrible and destructive effects on
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student&
#039; s education, the methods of teaching and social behavior in the
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class
and list goes on. My arguments
are listed
below which will strengthen my point of view:

To
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begin
with, nobody could overlook this fact that the
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teachers
play a crucial role in society.
Besides
teaching or taking exam, their role in social aspects of
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students&
#039; life is undeniable. If we postulate that they will
be paid
base on
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students’
score, the circumstance of
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classes
will be
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changed
.
For instance
, talking about
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students&
#039; favorites, telling joke and creating a joyful condition for
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students
will be unimportant and even worse the
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teacher
may become to apathetic
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people
who looking for more much money. It goes without saying that
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the ambient of
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classes
will become to a rigid room;
consequently
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students
will
be frustrated
from attending in it.

The second reason that I refute this
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idea
lies in the fact that the
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teachers
for receiving more fund, will
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ignore
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some
activities in the
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classes
.
For example
,
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some
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teachers
divide their
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class
to 2 groups and
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students
will be able to participate in teamwork.
Spontaneously
sharing ability of experiences
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improves
in
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students’
mental and
subsequently
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students&
#039; performance will
be raised
. As we all know, teamwork
usually
does not
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affect
on
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students’
grades;
hence
it will
be removed
gradually
from education system. It is
naturally
that when money interferes in anything,
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people
will prefer their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
profit.

I am going to empower my reasons by following discussion. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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students
who have trouble in learning,
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so
in an ordinary
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class
the
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teacher
spends more time with them. When money enters in story, the
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teachers
will
be inclined
toward
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students
who learn faster. In fact a bias behavior will
be revealed
.

By taking all above mentioned arguments, this conclusion could
be drawn
that it is a useless
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idea
and can create
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a lot of
problems in a
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class
. It will be better to
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teachers
are judged
base on other things not
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students&
#039; mark.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. v. 96

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
386 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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