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Some people say that TV advertisements have benefits, while others believe the opposite. Discuss both views, give your own opinion and include examples from your experience. v.2

Some people say that TV advertisements have benefits, while others believe the opposite. v. 2
Advertisements play a vital role in selling of products. One of the most controversial issues today relates to that, television endorsement; either have more merits or demerits? In the further piece of essay, I am going to explore all the dimensions of the given topic through some examples and assertions and shape up my opinion by the end. The first step to understand that, why some people think that television have more pessimistic impacts? Broadly speaking, the prominent reason is fake products. There are many products which have fascinating designs as shown in the advertisements but when they are bought they are extremely dull. For instance, in a recent survey of advertising companies it was illustrated that, 60% of the people believe that products are neither similar nor work properly to the product shown in television broadcast. In addition, another reason for believing this is pressure. There are many advertisements on television which attracts many children easily and they become stubborn to buy these products which build up a pressure on parents. Similarly, these types of broadcast also manipulate people so badly and become an reason for negative impact. However, there are some people who think that these commercial adds on television have more optimistic impact. Why do they think so? The foremost reason popularity. They say that, commercial adds make the products well known and increases its selling. People often buy products which are in trend and mostly recommended by others. Moreover, the second fundamental reason is that, advertisements provides information about plethora of products which gives us right to choose the best product. For example, cornflakes have a variety of flavours for different ranges to offer for different age groups and now also for people want to lose weight, hence it provides several choices to select from. In conclusion, I tend to believe that, both the aspects are convincing and advertising is significant as well but there are some steps that should be taken by government and they should make stringent laws against the companies which provide fake products and must ban products which manipulate children.
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Advertisements
play a vital role in selling of
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products
. One of the most controversial issues
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today
relates to that,
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television
endorsement; either have more merits or demerits? In the
further
piece of essay, I am going to explore all the dimensions of the
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given
topic through
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some
examples and assertions and shape up my opinion by the
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end
.

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first
step to understand that, why
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some
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people
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think
that
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television
have more pessimistic impacts?
Broadly
speaking, the prominent
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reason
is fake
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products
. There are
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many
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products
which have fascinating designs as shown in the
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advertisements
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but
when they are
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bought
they are
extremely
dull.
For instance
, in a recent survey of advertising
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companies
it
was illustrated
that, 60% of the
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people
believe that
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products
are neither similar nor work
properly
to the
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product
shown in
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television
broadcast.
In addition
, another
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reason
for believing this is pressure. There are
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many
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advertisements
on
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television
which attracts
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many
children
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easily and
they become stubborn to
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buy
these
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products
which build up a pressure on parents.
Similarly
, these types of broadcast
also
manipulate
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people
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so
badly
and become
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an
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reason
for
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negative
impact.

However
, there are
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some
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people
who
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think
that these commercial
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adds
on
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television
have more optimistic impact. Why do they
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think
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so
? The foremost
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popularity. They say that, commercial
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adds
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make
the
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products
well known and increases its selling.
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People
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often
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buy
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products
which are in trend and
mostly
recommended by others.
Moreover
, the second fundamental
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reason
is that,
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advertisements
provides information about plethora of
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products
which gives us right to choose the best
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product
.
For example
, cornflakes have a variety of
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flavours
for
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different
ranges to offer for
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different
age groups and
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now
also
for
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people
want to lose weight,
hence
it provides several choices to select from.

In conclusion
, I tend to believe that, both the aspects are convincing and advertising is significant
as well
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but
there are
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some
steps that should
be taken
by
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government and
they should
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make
stringent laws against the
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companies
which provide fake
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products
and
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must
ban
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products
which manipulate children.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that TV advertisements have benefits, while others believe the opposite. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6.0
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