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do you agree or disagree? Imagine that a professor requires students to learn as much as possible about a subject in a short period of life, is it better for the professor to require students to work together in a group or alone? v.64

Imagine that a professor requires students to learn as much as possible about a subject in a short period of life, is it better for the professor to require students to work together in a group or alone? v. 64
The growth of the fast The food industry has, without doubt, impacted on the eating habits and the health of many societies around the world. Diabetes, high cholesterol, heart and respiratory problems are all on the rise due to fat and sugar-rich food. However, the question is whether the higher tax would improve this situation or not. From an economic point of view, higher tax might seem sensible. In countries such as the USA, Australia and Britain, the well-being care system spends a large part of its budget on people with diet-related energy problems. It could be argued that these people have caused their own illnesses because of their choice of food. In this case, why should they expect the state to pay for their treatment? The tax could help fund the health care system. However, we also need to consider which socioeconomic group consumes fast cooking as the main part of their diet. Statistics indicate that lower income groups eat more of this fare than wealthier people. One possible reason for this is that fast snack is far cheaper than fresh produce. This is because many governments offer large subsidies to farmers who provide products for the fast drink industry, such as corn, wheat and beef. Fruit and vegetables, on the other hand, are not subsidised. Research suggests that many families simply cannot afford to buy healthy meat or pay higher taxes on fast cuisine. For them, fast meat is not a choice but a necessity. In conclusion, imposing a higher duty on fast feed does not seem to be the answer. If the government chose to do this, it would only lead to greater poverty and families facing
The growth of the
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fast


The food industry has, without doubt, impacted on the eating habits and the health of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
societies around the world. Diabetes, high cholesterol, heart and respiratory problems are all on the rise due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
and sugar-rich food.
However
, the question is whether the higher
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tax
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
this situation or not.

From an economic point of view, higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
might seem sensible. In countries such as the USA, Australia and Britain, the well-being care system spends a large part of its budget on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with diet-related energy problems. It could
be argued
that these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have caused their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
illnesses
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because
of their choice of food.
In this case
, why should they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
the state to pay for their treatment? The
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tax
could
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help
fund the health care system.

However
, we
also
need to consider which socioeconomic group consumes
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fast
cooking as the main part of their diet. Statistics indicate that lower income groups eat more of this fare than wealthier
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. One possible reason for this is that
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fast
snack is far cheaper than fresh produce. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
offer large subsidies to farmers who provide products for the
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fast
drink industry, such as corn, wheat and beef. Fruit and vegetables,
on the other hand
, are not
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subsidised
. Research suggests that
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many
families
simply
cannot afford to
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buy
healthy meat or pay higher
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taxes
on
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fast
cuisine. For them,
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fast
meat is not a choice
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but
a necessity.

In conclusion
, imposing a higher duty on
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fast
feed does not seem to be the answer. If the
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government
chose to do this, it would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
lead to greater poverty and families
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IELTS essay Imagine that a professor requires students to learn as much as possible about a subject in a short period of life, is it better for the professor to require students to work together in a group or alone? v. 64

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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