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do you agree or disagree? the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make new friends easily. v.19

the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make new friends easily. v. 19
With the increasing level of pollution in the environment today, it is a debated issue whether plastic shopping bags should be restricted due to land and water pollution. It is disagreed that the use of plastic shopping bags should be prohibited as reasons such as lack of durable alternative shopping bags as well as recycling of plastic bags will be discussed to prove this. First of all, paper bags are most times used in place of polythene bags tend to be fragile. They do not hold much quantity of items bought in shops. For instance, heavy objects purchased in shops are likely to be wrapped in plastic bags as that is the only way to keep them safe and handy. Therefore, alternative shopping bags which are environmentally friendly should be made to replace plastics which are stronger and serve a better purpose as shopping bags. Secondly, with the invention of recycling, waste is turned into luxury. Plastic shopping bags are not left out in this new technology. To clarify, most people gather plastic bags and turn them into useful products like plastic bottles and even newer plastic products for household use. This ensures a reduced rate of pollution in the land and sea. So, plastic shopping bag is a recycled material and to a higher degree, recycling comes a cleaner and safer environment. In conclusion, I agree that abolishing the use of plastic shopping bags is not feasible because they are yet to be replaced with better alternatives and also plastic bags are prone to recycling making the land and sea less polluted.
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today
, it is a debated issue whether
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plastic
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shopping
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bags
should
be restricted
due to land and water pollution. It
is disagreed
that the
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use
of
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plastic
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shopping
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bags
should
be prohibited
as reasons such as lack of durable alternative
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shopping
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bags
as well
as
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recycling
of
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plastic
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bags
will
be discussed
to prove this.

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First of all
, paper
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bags
are most times
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used
in place of polythene
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bags
tend to be fragile. They do not hold much quantity of items
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bought
in shops.
For instance
, heavy objects
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purchased
in shops are likely to
be wrapped
in
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plastic
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bags
as
that is
the
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only
way to
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keep
them safe and handy.
Therefore
, alternative
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shopping
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bags
which are
environmentally
friendly should
be made
to replace
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plastics
which are stronger and serve a better purpose as
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shopping
bags.

Secondly
, with the invention of
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recycling
, waste
is turned
into luxury.
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Plastic
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shopping
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bags
are not
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left
out in this new technology. To clarify, most
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people
gather
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plastic
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bags
and turn them into useful products like
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plastic
bottles and even newer
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plastic
products for household
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use
. This ensures a
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reduced
rate of pollution in the land and sea.
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So
,
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plastic
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shopping
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bag
is a recycled material and to a higher degree,
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recycling
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comes
a cleaner and safer environment.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that abolishing the
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use
of
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plastic
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shopping
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bags
is not feasible
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because
they are
yet
to
be replaced
with better alternatives and
also
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plastic
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bags
are prone to
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recycling
making the land and sea less polluted.
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IELTS essay the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make new friends easily. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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