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Do you agree or disagree? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea. v.183

Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea. v. 183
life virtually has been hard for everyone. No matter when or in which century we are living. people always have difficulties and issues to come up with and those issues may be different in different times but they are still issues. As we know technology had an enormous impression in our lives and helps us in different situations even in those that are very simple. As a result, I agree that life today is easier than past because our grandparents didn’t have this technology that we have so they should handle problems and difficulties that we are doing easily today without even thinking that how we are doing them. Now I’m going to explain my idea by bringing some reasons and examples. First of all, in past people even didn’t had a washing machine to wash and dry their clothes so they had to wash their clothes with their hands and after that try to make it dry however, we do it easily by putting them in washing machine and the machine do it all for us. Secondly, in today life smart phones has an important role which in past people didn’t have even a simple phone so they can make their calls or easily send their messages and if they want to say something to their families or friend they had to go meet them and say it in person. however, we almost do everything with these phones not just calling or texting for instance we do shopping, taking a cap, etc. Thirdly, we can point out to transportation service that we have variety of them. For example these days if people want to go on a travel they can choose easily between bus, train or an airplane considering their interests but, In past people should travel with their horses which was so hard and took a lots of time to reach the destination. Moreover, they could risk their lives during these travels because of many reasons like being attacked by animals or sudden climate changes. To sum up, due to those reason that I explained above believe that today life is much easier than it was before.
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life
virtually
has been
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hard
for everyone. No matter when or in which century we are living.
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people
always have difficulties and issues to
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come
up with and those issues may be
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different
in
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different
times
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but
they are
still
issues. As we know technology had an enormous impression in our
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lives
and
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helps
us in
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different
situations even in those that are
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very
simple.
As a result
, I
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agree
that
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life
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today
is easier than
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past
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because
our grandparents didn’t have this technology that we have
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so
they should handle problems and difficulties that we are doing
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easily
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today
without even thinking that how we are doing them.
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Now
I’m going to
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explain
my
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idea
by bringing
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some
reasons and examples.

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First of all
, in
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past
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people
even didn’t
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had
a washing machine to wash and dry their clothes
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so
they had to wash their clothes with their hands and after that try to
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make
it dry
however
, we do it
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easily
by putting them in washing machine and the machine do it all for us.

Secondly
, in
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today
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life
smart phones has an
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important
role which in
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past
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people
didn’t have even a simple phone
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so
they can
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make
their calls or
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easily
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send
their messages and if they want to say something to their families or friend they had to go
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meet
them and say it in person.
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however
, we almost do everything with these phones not
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just
calling or texting
for instance
we
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do shopping
, taking a cap, etc.

Thirdly
, we can point out to transportation service that we have variety of them.
For example
these days if
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people
want to go on a travel they can choose
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easily
between bus, train or an airplane considering their interests
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but
, In
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past
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people
should travel with their horses which was
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so
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hard
and took
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a lot" or simply "lots"?
a lots
of time to reach the destination.
Moreover
, they could
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risk
their
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lives
during these travels
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because
of
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many
reasons like
being attacked
by animals or sudden climate
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changes
.

To sum up, due to those reason that I
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explained
above believe that
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today
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life
is much easier than it was
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before
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea. v. 183

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
359 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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