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Do you agree or disagree? in 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books any more. v.101

in 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books any more. v. 101
The question is whether in 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books any more or not. Everyone in consideration to his private vantage point can maintain a specific direction toward this surmise, however I am willing to affirm this idea will become to reality. My arguments and reasons are listed below which will strengthen my point of view: To begin with, Needless to say that technology has changed the world. Anything which was being imagined to be impossible nowadays is plausible. The sophisticated companies are providing the equipped tools and devices for more welfare. For instance, in recent years some iPods have been designed based on ancient tablets. These devices are not only light and compact, but also they have a great capacity for saving data. Inasmuch people are always looking for more comfort; it is obvious that books will be replaced with iPods and their new version. The second reason why I advocate this idea lies in the fact of saving money. Despite of the hug mass of paper, it is still very expensive at least in my country; hence students and their family will would rather electric devices than a lot of books. Today' s education system uses a book for every major and if we considerate to the cost of consumable paper in country, it can be disappointing. Instead of paying money for paper, people will be able to spend their budget for indispensable things like buying high speed of internet, purchasing accounts for downloading and a lot of other things for getting information faster. I am inclined to empower my arguments by following discussion. Now people are aware toward their environment more than past. As we all know global warming are increasing extremely, consequently more books is equal more deforestation. Nobody could overlook the destructive effects of heating of Earth on natural environment, humans and animals. By taking all above mentioned arguments, I strongly believe that the books will be reduced in future as now their electric versions of them are accessible and cost effective.
The question is whether in 20 years from
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now
on, students will not
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use
printed
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books
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
or not. Everyone in consideration to his private vantage point can maintain a specific direction toward this surmise,
however
I am willing to affirm this
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idea
will become to reality. My arguments and reasons
are listed
below which will strengthen my point of view:

To
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begin
with, Needless to say that technology has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
the world. Anything which was
being imagined
to be impossible nowadays is plausible. The sophisticated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are providing the equipped tools and devices for more welfare.
For instance
, in recent years
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some
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iPods
have
been designed
based on ancient tablets. These devices are not
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only
light and compact,
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but
also
they have a great capacity for saving data. Inasmuch
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people
are always looking for more comfort; it is obvious that
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books
will
be replaced
with
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iPods
and their new version.

The second reason why I advocate this
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idea
lies in the fact of saving money.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
the hug mass of paper, it is
still
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very
expensive at least in my country;
hence
students and their family will would
rather
electric devices than
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a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
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Today&
#039; s education system
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uses
a
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book
for every major and if
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we considerate
to the cost of consumable paper in country, it can be disappointing.
Instead
of paying money for paper,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will be able to spend their budget for indispensable things like buying high speed of internet, purchasing accounts for downloading and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
other things for getting information faster.

I
am inclined
to empower my arguments by following discussion.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are aware toward their environment more than past. As we all know global warming are increasing
extremely
,
consequently
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
is equal more deforestation. Nobody could overlook the destructive effects of heating of Earth on natural environment, humans and animals.

By taking all above mentioned arguments, I
strongly
believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
in future as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
their electric versions of them are accessible and cost effective.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay in 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books any more. v. 101

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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