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Some people think that printed books are not necessary i the digital area because all writings can be stored electronically. Others think printed books play important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that printed books are not necessary i the digital area because all writings can be stored electronically. Others think printed books play important role. v. 1
Recently, there are a lot of students taking an internship in industries for a short time span without getting paid as part of their education curriculum. I believe, there are more advantages to it than disadvantages. In this essay I would keep points justifying my opinion. Firstly, college going learners are mostly into the theoretical concepts throughout their studying life with minimal practical exposure. Working in industries gives them a practical understanding of how things are done. They get an idea of the office culture too. In future, when they become a permanent office worker it will not take much time for them to adapt to the routine. For example, nowadays a lot of IT companies offer Engineering undergraduate internship for a year or six months. There are experienced Engineers already working who can guide them in their assignment with all their practical knowledge. Some companies even pay a considerable amount to them. This turns out to be a win win situation for both. The students get some hands on practical projects and the company gets their job done at a comparatively low cost. Many people believe that college lads are not matured enough to understand the seriousness of working in a company. They act childish and are more prone to making mistakes in their work. Eventually, messing up all for what they were hired for. For example, in an IT industry if the learners make some intense mistake in coding it can cause the entire application to crash down causing heavy losses. But I believe there can always be a solution to every problem. There are skilled and experienced Engineers already working. The freshers can seek guidance and ask for help if they are stuck in some problem. Needless to say, it is the duty of the experienced one's to make sure the work is done with the utmost quality and on time. To conclude, many people might say that Engineering lads are immature to handle office tasks at such a tender age, but I believe with a fresh mind they are more enthusiastic and eager to know things. So the productivity will be more from them than from the already working employees and also at a low cost.
Recently, there are
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a lot of
students taking an internship in industries for a short time span without getting paid as part of their education curriculum. I
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believe
, there are more advantages to it than disadvantages. In this essay I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
points justifying my opinion.

Firstly
, college going learners are
mostly
into the theoretical concepts throughout their studying life with minimal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
exposure.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Working
in industries gives them a
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practical
understanding of how things
are done
. They
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get
an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of the office culture too.
Did you mean: "In the future"?
In future
, when they become a permanent office worker it will not take much time for them to adapt to the routine.

For example
, nowadays
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a lot of
IT
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companies
offer Engineering undergraduate internship for a year or six months. There
are experienced
Engineers already
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working
who can guide them in their assignment with all their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
practical
knowledge.
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Some
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companies
even pay a considerable amount to them. This turns out to be a
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win win
situation for both. The students
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get
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some
hands on
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practical
projects and the
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company
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gets
their job done at a
comparatively
low cost.

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Many
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people
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believe
that college lads are not matured
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enough
to understand the seriousness of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
in a
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company
. They act childish and are more prone to making mistakes in their work.
Eventually
, messing up all for what they
were hired
for.
For example
, in an IT industry if the learners
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make
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some
intense mistake in coding it can cause the entire application to crash down causing heavy losses.
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But
I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
there can always be a solution to every problem. There
are skilled
and experienced Engineers already
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working
. The freshers can seek guidance and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
if they
are stuck
in
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some
problem. Needless to say, it is the duty of the experienced one's to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure the work
is done
with the utmost quality and on time.

To conclude
,
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
might say that Engineering lads are immature to handle office tasks at such a tender age,
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but
I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
with a fresh mind they are more enthusiastic and eager to know things.
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So
the productivity will be more from them than from the already
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
employees and
also
at a low cost.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that printed books are not necessary i the digital area because all writings can be stored electronically. Others think printed books play important role. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
370 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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