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Interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world In your opinion should school be compulsory for all children or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home Support your opinion with reasons and e v.2

Interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world In your opinion should school be compulsory for all children or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home Support your opinion with reasons and e v. 2
I strongly believe that school should be compulsory for all children, with very few exceptions. Most parents do not have the professional teaching skills and range of knowledge that their children are exposed to at school. Only children who have special circumstances that prevent them from attending school should be taught at home, in my opinion. Parents teach their children many things, They teach them skills they need in daily life, such as how to keep their rooms clean or how to tie their shoes. They teach them moral values such as honesty and kindness. These are very important lessons, but they are very disparate from the academic lessons children learn at school. Most parents, unless they are professional teachers themselves, do not have professional teaching skills. They have not been trained to instruct academic skills such as writing, reading, and arithmetic. The best place for children to learn these things is at school under the guidance of professional educators. Children are exposed to a much wider range of knowledge at school than they ever could be at home, no matter now well educated their parents are. At home, children have their parents and possibly also their grandparents. This is a limited number of adults. At school, on the other hand, children study with a variety of teachers. Each of these teachers has specialized knowledge about his or her subject area. This gives schoolchildren the opportunity to learn about many more things than their parents could teach them at home. Some children cannot attend school for special reasons. Some live too far away from school. Some are professional actors and have to work during the school day. Some have physical disabilities or health problems that make it difficult for them to move around. In cases such as these, learning at home is the only choice. However, these are exceptional cases. No matter how well educated parents are or how much they love their children, they cannot provide the same level of education that a school can. That is why I believe that school should be compulsory for all children.
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believe that
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school
should be compulsory for all
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children
, with
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very
few exceptions. Most
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parents
do not have the
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professional
teaching
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skills
and range of knowledge that their
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children
are exposed
to at
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school
.
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Only
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children
who have special circumstances that
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prevent
them from attending
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school
should
be taught
at home, in my opinion.

Parents
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teach
their
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children
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many
things, They
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teach
them
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skills
they need in daily life, such as how to
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keep
their rooms clean or how to tie their shoes. They
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teach
them moral values such as honesty and kindness. These are
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very
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important
lessons,
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but
they are
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very
disparate from the academic lessons
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children
learn at
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school
. Most
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parents
, unless they are
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professional
teachers themselves, do not have
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professional
teaching
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skills
. They have not
been trained
to instruct academic
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skills
such as writing, reading, and arithmetic. The best place for
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children
to learn these things is at
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school
under the guidance of
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professional
educators.

Children
are exposed
to a much wider range of knowledge at
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school
than they ever could be at home, no matter
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now
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well educated
their
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parents
are. At home,
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children
have their
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parents
and
possibly
also
their grandparents. This is a limited number of adults. At
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school
,
on the other hand
,
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children
study with a variety of teachers. Each of these teachers has specialized knowledge about
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his or her
subject area. This gives schoolchildren the opportunity to learn about
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many
more things than their
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parents
could
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teach
them at home.

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Some
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children
cannot attend
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school
for special reasons.
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Some
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live
too far away from
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school
.
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Some
are
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professional
actors and
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have to
work during the
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school
day.
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Some
have physical disabilities or health problems that
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make
it difficult for them to
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move
around. In cases such as these, learning at home is the
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only
choice.
However
, these are exceptional cases.

No matter how
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well educated
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parents
are or how much they
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love
their
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children
, they cannot provide the same level of education that a
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school
can.
That is
why I believe that
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school
should be compulsory for all
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children
.
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42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world In your opinion should school be compulsory for all children or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home Support your opinion with reasons and e v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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