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Do you agree or diagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, iuniversities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.1

To improve the quality of education, iuniversities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1
The most pressing problems in the world nowadays is environmental damage. When it comes to tackle the problems, people think that government should raise the cost of fuel, however, it is not the only solution to address the environmental problems. This essay will take a closer look at the side view. First of all, the increase in fuel cost is able to reduce the commodity consumptions. It directly discourages the utilization and promotes the popularity of public transportations, and the carbon dioxide emissions released into the air are lessened and it impedes the process of air pollution and global warming. For example, if the gasoline is more expensive, people tend to take the bus or train rather than their own cars. Besides, it should be improved the efficiency of house appliances such as air conditioning, heating, cooking and so on, while the government could pass laws to limit the emissions from manufacturing generations. For example, people are able to switch to energy-efficient lighting instead of normal lighting. Raising the cost of fossil fuel may lead to hassle living conditions for people who live in poverty-stricken countries. The higher tax on fuel is proportionate to higher production cost, which depends on machines operated by fossil fuel, therefore the inhabitants may struggle with more expensive goods. By investing more in alternative energies for sustainable growth, I believe that the government can play a paramount in addressing the environmental problems, and I would argue that the best solution is to educate people with their awareness of our daily energy use to minimize the carbon dioxide emissions. Taking everything into consideration, since environmental damage is a global issue and increase the price of fuel is a short-term solution to address the environmental problems, as individuals we are able to contribute by taking steps to reduce our carbon dioxide emissions.
The most pressing
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problems
in the world nowadays is
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environmental
damage. When it
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comes
to tackle the
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problems
,
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people
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think
that
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government
should raise the
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cost
of
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fuel
,
however
, it is not the
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only
solution to address the
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environmental
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problems
. This essay will take a closer look at the side view.

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First of all
, the increase in
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fuel
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cost
is able to
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reduce
the commodity
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consumptions
. It
directly
discourages the utilization and promotes the popularity of public transportations, and the carbon dioxide emissions released into the air
are lessened
and it impedes the process of air pollution and global warming.
For example
, if the gasoline is more expensive,
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people
tend to take the bus or train
rather
than their
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own
cars.
Besides
, it should be
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improved
the efficiency of
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house
appliances such as air conditioning, heating, cooking and
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so
on, while the
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government
could pass laws to limit the emissions from manufacturing generations.
For example
,
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people
are able to switch to energy-efficient lighting
instead
of normal lighting.

Raising the
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cost
of fossil
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fuel
may lead to hassle living conditions for
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people
who
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live
in poverty-stricken countries. The higher tax on
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fuel
is proportionate to higher production
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cost
, which depends on machines operated by fossil
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fuel
,
therefore
the inhabitants may struggle with more expensive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
. By investing more in alternative energies for sustainable growth, I believe that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can play a paramount in addressing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
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problems
, and I would argue that the best solution is to educate
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people
with their awareness of our daily energy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
to minimize the carbon dioxide emissions.

Taking everything into consideration, since
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environmental
damage is a global issue and increase the price of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
is a short-term solution to address the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
, as individuals we are able to contribute by taking steps to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
our carbon dioxide emissions.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay To improve the quality of education, iuniversities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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