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Do we need music in our lives?

Do we need music in our lives? Ew0QR
Music is the key to creativity. It is acceptable by the whole Universe. Everybody considers music as a key to reduce stress. Moreover, it plays a significant role in our life like a therapy to stay fit and calm. In both the situations like shadow or sun it plays both the roles to keep refreshed. There was a situation when I was lonely and set back from the society it was with the help of music that I regained my energy though dance on the songs of my favourite. Life without music is meaningless like Christmas without carols. No one can imagine his/her life without
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is the key to creativity. It is acceptable by the whole Universe. Everybody considers
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music
as a key to
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reduce
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refreshed. There was a situation when I was lonely and set back from the society it was with the
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that I regained my energy though dance on the songs of my
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. Life without
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is meaningless like Christmas without carols. No one can imagine his/her life
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IELTS essay Do we need music in our lives?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
104 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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