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Should young people be telling adults what to do

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Currently, the younger generation is becoming more conscious of the world's problems, and, like Greta Thurberg, they are calling for adults to change to improve their lives. Some people believe that they are too young and inexperienced to instruct adults. However, I feel that young generations should share their perspectives to boost adult consciousness and help them improve their lives. Opponents of this concept believe that young people are too young and inexperienced to make decisions for themselves. This can't be denied. However, young people sharing their minds provides an opportunity for adults to reflect on their failings and work together to improve their lives. Adults, despite their maturity and experience, might still have a lot of flaws. They are sometimes scared to speak up in conversations for fear of public censure, but young people are acutely aware of the negative consequences of one issue, they speak up to safeguard their own life without regard for public opinion. Furthermore, due to technological advances, young people will be able to learn, update, and engage in free scientific research sessions over the internet. If they do speak up, I'm sure they have done much research and want to encourage people to change their minds and behavior. I am convinced that the younger generation is entitled to a voice since they have the right to protect their future lives and wish to make the world a better place. Young people, like everyone else, have the right to speak their minds in today's society. They are dynamic and always looking forward. They are aware that there is a range of problems surrounding them that adults have chosen to ignore rather than deal with. They speak up as a source of motivation and inspiration for those around them to change. For example, Greta Thunberg, a 17-year-old activist, spoke out about climate change at a conference in 2019. She seeks to influence people's behavior to lessen the consequences later on. Furthermore, young people are always hoping for a bright future. They speak up not to brag, but to make adults aware of reality and encourage them to make changes. Adults may not always solve problems, but thanks to the call from young people, they will have to reconsider, and leaders will have to change to provide a good life for the next generation. Mature people are not always right, they also need to listen to the opinions of young people to improve themselves. We need to listen to everyone, even young people. This helps us to have an objective view of everything and makes our lives better. So I think young people should tell and share with adults what to do.
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believe that they are too
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young
and inexperienced to instruct
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, I feel that
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generations should share their perspectives to boost adult consciousness and
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help
them
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their
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.

Opponents of this concept believe that
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young
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people
are too
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young
and inexperienced to
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make
decisions for themselves. This can't
be denied
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However
,
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young
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people
sharing their minds provides an opportunity for
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adults
to reflect on their failings and work together to
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improve
their
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lives
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, despite their maturity and experience, might
still
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flaws. They are
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scared to
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speak
up in conversations for fear of public censure,
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but
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young
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people
are
acutely
aware of the
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negative
consequences of one issue, they
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speak
up to safeguard their
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own
life without regard for public opinion.
Furthermore
, due to technological advances,
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young
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people
will be able to learn, update, and engage in free scientific research sessions over the internet. If they do
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speak
up, I'm sure they have done much research and want to encourage
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people
to
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change
their minds and behavior.

I
am convinced
that the younger generation
is entitled
to a voice since they have the right to protect their future
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lives
and wish to
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make
the world a better place.
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Young
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people
, like everyone else, have the right to
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speak
their minds in
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today
's society. They are dynamic and always looking forward. They are aware that there is a range of problems surrounding them that
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adults
have chosen to
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rather
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They
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speak
up as a source of motivation and inspiration for those around them to
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change
.
For example
, Greta Thunberg, a 17-year-
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old
activist, spoke out about climate
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change
at a conference in 2019. She seeks to influence
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people
's behavior to lessen the consequences later on.
Furthermore
,
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young
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people
are always hoping for a bright future. They
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speak
up not to brag,
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but
to
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aware of reality and encourage them to
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changes
.
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Adults
may not always solve problems,
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thanks to the call from
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, they will
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reconsider, and leaders will
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to provide a
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life for the
next
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Mature
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are not always right, they
also
need to listen to the opinions of
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young
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people
to
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improve
themselves. We need to listen to everyone, even
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young
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people
. This
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helps
us to have an objective view of everything and
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our
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lives
better.
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I
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think
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young
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should
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tell
and share with
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adults
what to do.
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IELTS essay Should young people be telling adults what to do

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
445 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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