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do agree or disagree/ playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them v.1

do agree or disagree/ playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them v. 1
Technology has been flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us new avenues while keeping ourselves updated with the latest news and current affairs. Therefore, a fair amount of people believe, a conventional way of newspaper reading will be disappeared. I do not completely with accord with it because the conventional newspaper is the easiest and cheapest way to get news. To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting news are still popular. First of all, reading the newspaper has become ardent habit of many people. Everyone, whether from affluent or middle class is seen desperately waiting for paper in the morning and enjoy it's reading with a cup of tea. Moreover, these are the most portable, cheapest an easiest way of knowing about the global activities. It can be carried from one place to another in bag and available at economical prices. It is so handy and merely by continuing flip of pages can make you omniscient. Secondly, electricity and other appliances are not required. Moreover, the other attachments are like icing on the cake. For instance, the Hindustan have times has multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and so on. However, undoubtedly, technology has given the radical approach to reading news, for example, the videos provide a full and clear view to reading besides that we can download, share and forward it to our relatives and friends. Needless to say that technophobic will be having no place in this ever-advanced modern world. To conclude, the lives of people are drastically affected by advanced versions of technology yet, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to the existing traditional newspaper and magazines.
Technology has been flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us
new
avenues while keeping ourselves updated with the latest
news
and
current
affairs.
Therefore
, a
fair
amount of
people
believe, a conventional way of
newspaper
reading
will
be disappeared
. I do not completely with accord with it
because
the conventional
newspaper
is the easiest and cheapest way to
get
news.

To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting
news
are
still
popular.
First of all
,
reading
the
newspaper
has become ardent habit of
many
people
. Everyone, whether from affluent or middle
class
is
seen
desperately
waiting for paper in the morning and enjoy it's
reading
with a cup of tea.
Moreover
, these are the most portable, cheapest
an
easiest way of knowing about the global activities. It can
be carried
from one place to another in bag and available at economical prices. It is
so
handy and
merely
by continuing flip of pages can
make
you omniscient.
Secondly
, electricity and other appliances are not required.
Moreover
, the other attachments are like icing on the cake.
For instance
, the Hindustan have times has multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and
so
on.

However
,
undoubtedly
, technology has
given
the radical approach to
reading
news
,
for example
, the videos provide a full and
clear
view to
reading
besides
that we can download, share and forward it to our relatives and friends. Needless to say that
technophobic
will be having no place in this ever-advanced modern world.

To conclude
, the
lives
of
people
are
drastically
affected
by advanced versions of technology
yet
, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to the existing traditional
newspaper
and magazines.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay do agree or disagree/ playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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