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Disruptive school children have a negative impact on others. Some people suggest that students who are noisy should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree?

Disruptive school children have a negative impact on others. Some people suggest that students who are noisy should be grouped together and taught separately. alp27
Almost every school and class have the students who behave in on inappropriate way. Some people suggest that they should be segregated and taught in separate groups to allow well-mannered children to get better knowledge. I disagree with this idea, even though it seems favourable. Studying process of bad-behaved children and future consequences of this practice should be considered before making any decision. Separation of the students can have an impact on the process of teaching and learning. Providing the children with appropriate behavior are taught separately, they are likely to get tuition and teaching them can be a good experience for teachers as well. However, teaching the ones who behave badly is highly likely to be troublesome. Most teachers do not want to conduct lessons to these young people. As a result, they cannot learn well, as many qualified teachers ignore them. Admittedly, well-behaved students and their parents find this suggestion appealing, but this artificial school atmosphere may be problematic in the future. In other words, taking away noisy schoolchildren out of class can be favourable for the ones who are obedient, but this practice is impossible to do in real life. Schools should teach children to be ready for adult life, in which both good and bad people can be found. Finally, separated students can develop sense of isolation. They may feel like they are ignored by their contemporaries who used to be in the same class before. Consequently, they may ignore the society as a whole. Perhaps, this will have a negative result in the future. We have seen lots of criminals who were initially rejected at school and turned to crime. To conclude, although we can have some advantages results with applying this system, long-term consequences should also be taken into account. In fact, if the student behaves improperly it does not mean that he is not smart. Care and kindness can be a better solution than separation.
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have the
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students
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who
behave in on inappropriate way.
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people
suggest that they should
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and taught in separate groups to
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allow
well-mannered
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children
to
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get
better knowledge. I disagree with this
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,
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it seems
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favourable
. Studying process of
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bad
-behaved
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children
and future consequences of this practice should
be considered
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before
making any decision.

Separation of the
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students
can have an impact on the process of teaching and learning. Providing the
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children
with appropriate behavior
are taught
separately
, they are likely to
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get
tuition and teaching them can be a
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good
experience for teachers
as well
.
However
, teaching the
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ones
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who
behave
badly
is
highly
likely to be troublesome. Most teachers do not want to conduct lessons to these young
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people
.
As a result
, they cannot learn well, as
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many
qualified teachers
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ignore
them.

Admittedly
, well-behaved
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students
and their parents find this suggestion appealing,
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but
this artificial
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school
atmosphere may be problematic in the future.
In other words
, taking away noisy schoolchildren out of
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class
can be
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favourable
for the
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ones
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who
are obedient,
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but
this practice is impossible to do in real life.
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should teach
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children
to be ready for adult life, in which both
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good
and
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people
can
be found
.

Finally
, separated
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students
can develop sense of isolation. They may feel like they are
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ignored
by their contemporaries
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who
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used
to be in the same
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class
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before
.
Consequently
, they may
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ignore
the society as a whole. Perhaps, this will have a
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negative
result in the future. We have
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seen
lots of criminals
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who
were
initially
rejected at
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school
and turned to crime.

To conclude
, although we can have
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some
advantages results with applying this system, long-term consequences should
also
be taken
into account. In fact, if the
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student
behaves
improperly
it does not mean that he is not smart. Care and kindness can be a better solution than separation.
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IELTS essay Disruptive school children have a negative impact on others. Some people suggest that students who are noisy should be grouped together and taught separately.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
6.0
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