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Discuss whether the Loisel’s chose the right course of action when they found the necklace was missing ? what other choices where open to them and why were these not chosen” Use example and evidence from the story to highlight your arguments

Discuss whether the Loisel’s chose the right course of action when they found the necklace was missing? what other choices where open to them and why were these not chosen” Use example and evidence from the story to highlight your arguments okonb
These days some people may believe that saying the truth considered as an embarrassing situation like Loisel’s situation. Moreover, they might consider it as a white lie that would not affect. On the other hand other people find it a shame to lie, especially if that person helped you as Losisel’s friend. This essay will discuss two ideas instead of lying to tickle up this statement, and will draw my point of view. The most efficient solution that when Loisel’s found that the necklace was lost, she must have told her friend the truth from the beginning instead of borrowing money from other people and searching for an alternative one in all shops and wasting her time. Also, her husband‘s time and energy. If she told her friend the truth, she would knew that it was not an original one from the beginning. Thus, she would continue her life without that tragedy. Another important point is the satisfaction with what you have, happiness does not come from money, but it comes from your heart. ” Living healthy life with your lovers even you are poor is much better from living life alone without peace”As one said. So, I think that of Loisel’s went to the party with her own possessions she would not put herself and her husband in such a situation like that which let them to dedicate their whole life to afford the value of the necklace and bearing all that much of debts which is out of their control. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of that situation, In my opinion, facing the consequences of your actions without hiding the truth beyond it is much better for you and everyone else, because remember that whenever you do something either a good thing or a bad thing it will return to you one day. In addition you are the role model for your children and you are representing your family so make sure to put a good impression.
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may believe that saying the
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considered as an embarrassing
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situation
like
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Loisel
’s
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.
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, they might consider it as a white lie that would not affect.
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find it a shame to lie,
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helped
you as
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Losisel
’s friend. This essay will discuss two
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instead
of lying to tickle up this statement, and will draw my point of view.

The most efficient solution that when
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’s found that the necklace
was lost
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told
her friend the
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truth
from the beginning
instead
of borrowing money from other
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people
and searching for an alternative one in all shops and wasting her time.
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, her husband‘s time and energy. If she
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told
her friend the
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, she would
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that it was not an original one from the beginning.
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without that tragedy.

Another
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point is the satisfaction with what you have, happiness does not
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from money,
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it
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from your heart. ” Living healthy
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with your lovers even you are poor is much better from living
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alone without peace
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’s went to the party with her
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possessions she would not put herself and her husband in such a
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like that which
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them to dedicate their whole
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to afford the value of the necklace and bearing all that much of debts which is out of their control.

In conclusion
, after a careful analysis of that
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situation
, In my opinion, facing the consequences of your actions without hiding the
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truth
beyond it is much better for you and everyone else,
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remember that whenever you do something either a
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thing or a
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thing it will return to you one day. In
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are the role model for your children and you are representing your family
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sure to put a
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impression.
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IELTS essay Discuss whether the Loisel’s chose the right course of action when they found the necklace was missing? what other choices where open to them and why were these not chosen” Use example and evidence from the story to highlight your arguments

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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