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Discribe The last movie you saw

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The story is about a large family. They have inhabited the big house, out of the city. The clan consisted of three girls and two boys also their father was an army soldier before he was addicted to wagering on football matches however, Their mother was a strong housewife. On a frigid day, the family had a cute party. It was Billy’s birthday. Alisha was his mother, she made a big cake for her son’s party. Other children had fun singing a song which tempts Alisha to start dance but the father recline on a sofa and he had only attention on TV. By a second Billy’s vision, became blurred and all movements around were stopped. He turned with a numb body to watch around. His father was still laying on the couch and there was a dismal sound from the TV. Suddenly he saw a sinister-looking of himself on the TV screen. The sound was: “Conceal yourself somewhere the peril could not find you”. By the sound over, everything became natural and time returned normal.
The story is about a large family. They have inhabited the
big
house
, out of the city. The clan consisted of three girls and two boys
also
their father was an army soldier
before
he
was addicted
to wagering on football matches
however
, Their mother was a strong housewife.

On a frigid day, the family had a cute party. It was Billy’s birthday. Alisha was his mother, she made a
big
cake for her son’s party. Other children had fun singing a song which tempts Alisha to
start
dance
but
the father recline on a
sofa and
he had
only
attention on TV. By a second Billy’s vision, became blurred and all movements around were
stopped
. He turned with a numb body to
watch
around. His father was
still
laying on the couch and there was a dismal sound from the TV.
Suddenly
he
saw
a sinister-looking of himself on the TV screen. The sound was: “Conceal yourself somewhere the peril could not find you”. By the sound over, everything became natural and time returned normal.
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IELTS essay Discribe The last movie you saw

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