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Discribe a trip that you like

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During this period, the epidemic is developing very complicatedly. This is a time that we need to have a high sense of disease prevention because traveling is impossible for us, so this is an opportunity for us to recall the good memories we had. This is a reason why I entered this contest ‘TAKE ME OUTSIDE’ with the desire to share the wonderful moments that I have experienced. It was about a year ago, I had the opportunity to go to what is known as the city of thousands of flowers – Da Lat. The more we discover, the more beauty and excitement in Dalat we find. Da Lat city is located in the center of the southern highlands, 300 km far from the north of Ho Chi Minh City. In this beautiful city, the weather changes constantly, the noon is quite warm and cool while in the evening it is great cold. In general, the climate is relatively mild and suitable for available flora and fauna to grow. This is also the reason that in Da Lat there are many kinds of beautiful and precious flowers. There are many ways to go to Da Lat such as airplanes, motorbikes, etc, …Although we like the experience of backpacking, we choose the safest and most prevalent way is by coach which takes about 5 – 6 hours to get to Da Lat. This is a self-sufficient trip because we will plan, schedule, book accommodation, book the transportation ourselves. For me, this is a new and useful experience because it helps our current studies as well as our future careers. To make the trip more convenient and easy, we should book the necessary services in advance. Our group was quite lucky to find a newly opened homestay, so we were able to rent it for a pretty cheap price only 200. 000VND per person per night. Along with utilities such as using the kitchen, BBQ grill, … and we also rented a motorbike to go around the city. About the schedule, we divided each day went in one direction. For instance, on day 1, we went in the direction of Mimosa pass, we went to famous and beautiful cafes to take pictures and see the city. As planned, we would go camping in the forest with a BBQ party around the campfire. However, it was quite difficult to do and the weather was not favorable so that plan was not carried out. Quite a pity! For me, this is an interesting trip with mixed emotions of happiness and sadness. But it was a part of my youth that helped me grow up and become more confident. Hope the pandemic will pass soon so that we can travel to more places and experience more. It is often said that life is a journey so never refuse a trip because every journey has its meaning.
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traveling is impossible for us,
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this is an opportunity for us to recall the
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good
memories we had. This is a reason why I entered this contest ‘TAKE ME OUTSIDE’ with the desire to share the wonderful moments that I have experienced. It was about a year ago, I had the opportunity to go to what
is known
as the city of thousands of flowers
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Lat. The more we discover, the more beauty and excitement in
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Dalat
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Lat city
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in the center of the southern highlands, 300 km far from the north of Ho Chi Minh City. In this
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city, the weather
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constantly
, the noon is
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warm and cool while in the evening it is great
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.
In general
, the climate is
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the reason that in
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Da
Lat there are
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kinds of
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and precious flowers. There are
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ways to go to
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it
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current
studies
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more convenient and easy, we should book the necessary services in advance. Our group was
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lucky to find a
newly
opened homestay,
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we were able to rent it for a pretty
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200. 000VND per person per night. Along with utilities such as using the kitchen, BBQ grill, … and we
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the city. As planned, we would go camping in the forest with a BBQ party around the campfire.
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, it was
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difficult to do and the weather was not favorable
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that plan was not carried out.
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a pity!

For me, this is an interesting
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trip
with mixed emotions of happiness and sadness.
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it was a part of my youth that
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helped
me grow up and become more confident. Hope the pandemic will pass
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soon
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that we can travel to more places and experience more. It is
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said that life is a journey
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never refuse a
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trip
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because
every journey has its meaning.
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IELTS essay Discribe a trip that you like

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
481 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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