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Differences berween countries are becoming less evident.Nowadays all around the world we see the same films,advertisements,fashion, brands ,and TV channels.

Differences berween countries are becoming less evident. Nowadays all around the world we see the same films, advertisements, fashion, brands, and TV channels. JL35w
At the present time a plethora of people suspect that dissimilarities almost which are not emerging amongst the countries, however, a number of things such as wearing clothes and so on, that are able to distinguished all around the world. In this essay, I will look at benefits and drawbacks of this and give my own opinion. On the one hand, these days numerous things are being maintained like traditions which are existence almost in all countries and as well as it has a lot of differences, if contrasted with others. Furthermore, it is clearly seen that style of wearing clothes play a vital role among the various countries, mainly between Asian and other continents. Side by side with this, a great deal of places where consist of different kinds of own TV channels. On the other hand, nowadays due to the fact that development of technology whoever are utilizing the same telephone brands such as Samsung, Iphone and so on. In many circumstances, a plethora of population are receiving similar advertisements and as well as attractive movies of particular countries are being watched. In other words, technology that is not ceasing in influencing to diminishing of differences between countries, Generally, whilst time is going on, everybody who are adapting to live with these types of things. In the final analysis, from my point of view, while other things which are related to technology are altering, each country`s traditions ought to be remained
At the present time a plethora of
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people
suspect that dissimilarities almost which are not emerging amongst the
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countries
,
however
, a number of things such as wearing clothes and
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so
on, that are able
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to distinguished
all around the world. In this essay, I will look at benefits and drawbacks of this and give my
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own
opinion.

On the one hand, these days numerous things are
being maintained
like traditions which are existence almost in all
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countries
and
as well
as it has
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a lot of
differences, if contrasted with others.
Furthermore
, it is
clearly
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seen
that style of wearing clothes play a vital role
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among
the various
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countries
,
mainly
between Asian and
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other
continents. Side by side with this, a great deal of places where consist of
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different
kinds of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
TV channels.

On the
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other
hand, nowadays due to the fact that development of technology whoever are utilizing the same telephone brands such as Samsung,
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Iphone
and
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so
on. In
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many
circumstances, a plethora of population are receiving similar advertisements and
as well
as attractive movies of particular
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countries
are being
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watched
. In
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other
words, technology
that is
not ceasing in influencing to diminishing of differences between
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countries
,
Generally
, whilst time is going on, everybody who are adapting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with these types of things.

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In
the final analysis, from my point of view, while
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other
things which
are related
to technology are altering, each
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country`s
traditions ought to
be remained

IELTS essay Differences berween countries are becoming less evident. Nowadays all around the world we see the same films, advertisements, fashion, brands, and TV channels.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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