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developing countries should not spend money on space because there is a lot of progress work to do for the welfare of the people in their countrylike housing and healthcare. To what extend do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and examples to justify your opinion.

developing countries should not spend money on space because there is a lot of progress work to do for the welfare of the people in their countrylike housing and healthcare. Give reasons and examples to justify your opinion. 8aWkr
In this modern era every country want to do research on space technology and also they want to send their own satellites. So, all developing countries have also started spending their currency in space by ignoring the fact try needs to be developed in many ways like healthcare, housing and many more. I totally agree with this statement. First and foremost, government should develop their country's healthcare as developing country do not have better healthcare facilities. For example: In this COVID-19 situation many countries like India were not have much ventilator's so there were numerous people who were dead due to shortage. Also, space does not contribute to the economy of the country rather employment contributes to the country leaders should try to increase employment opportunities so lifestyle of the individual gets perfect. Moreover, the poverty rate of developing country is high
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should develop their country's healthcare as developing
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do not have better healthcare facilities.
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like India were not
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have
much ventilator's
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there were numerous
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rather
employment contributes to the
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leaders should try to increase employment opportunities
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lifestyle of the individual
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IELTS essay developing countries should not spend money on space because there is a lot of progress work to do for the welfare of the people in their countrylike housing and healthcare. Give reasons and examples to justify your opinion.

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