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design of new building mission

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While some people argue that it's governments' mission to design new buildings, other see that investors who fund these projects have the right to choose their design. Personally, I reckon that it’s concession of people to select their design from freedom point of view, also this subsidize the innovation. On the one hand, since governments should control every precise detail in cities, many people claim that building and design should not break this rule. Due to the fact that every town has its own identify and pattern, governments is the most eligible entity to preserve this architectural approach. Furthermore, as many considerations are concerned for any indented-building layout environmentally, this category of people believes that governments are the best governor for this instructions and directives. However, these benefits can be added to others if some rule was assigned and distributed to any party who wishes to design by itself. On the other hand, in spite of the certain procedures which governments ought to take in prior to any new premises undertaken, plethora of people think it's the liberty of individuals to select the shape of the new blocks. Once people took the chance to design, this would support innovation and entrepreneurial in any community; therefore, new aesthetic conurbation will result. Moreover, people won't deem themselves in a democratic country unless they own the right to do whatever they want. Thus the more independent individuals are from their authorities; the more satisfied they will be. In conclusion, although a number of people wish to see the design is excluded only in governments' departments, other think that it's better when people participate in such mission. Personally, I bet that mixing national code with individuals' design would result in masterpieces.
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' mission to
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design
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new
buildings,
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that investors who fund these projects have the right to choose their
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design
.
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, I reckon that it’s concession of
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people
to select their
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design
from freedom point of view,
also
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this subsidize
the innovation.

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governments
should control every precise detail in cities,
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many
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people
claim that building and
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design
should not break this
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rule
. Due to the fact that every town has its
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own
identify and pattern,
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governments
is the most eligible entity to preserve this architectural approach.
Furthermore
, as
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many
considerations
are concerned
for any indented-building layout
environmentally
, this category of
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people
believes that
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governments
are the best governor for
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this
instructions and directives.
However
, these benefits can be
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added
to others if
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some
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rule
was assigned
and distributed to any party who wishes to
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design
by itself.

On the
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other
hand,
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in spite of
the certain procedures which
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governments
ought to take in prior to any
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new
premises undertaken, plethora of
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people
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think
it's the liberty of individuals to select the shape of the
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new
blocks. Once
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people
took the chance to
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design
, this would support innovation and entrepreneurial in any community;
therefore
,
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new
aesthetic conurbation will result.
Moreover
,
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people
won't deem themselves in a democratic country unless they
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own
the right to do whatever they want.
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Thus
the more independent individuals are from their authorities; the more satisfied they will be.

In conclusion
, although a number of
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people
wish to
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see
the
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design
is excluded
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only
in
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governments
' departments,
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other
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think
that it's better when
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people
participate in such mission.
Personally
, I bet that mixing national code with individuals'
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design
would result in masterpieces.
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IELTS essay design of new building mission

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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