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description chocolate production

description chocolate production YkKnd

First of all. Cacaos trees are grown in America Africa Indonesia are grown until the ripe red pods come out. Next, the pods are harvested and split to collect the white cacao beans by a special equipment. Then the beans are fermented among a number of layers from banana leaves before being spread on a mat which is placed under the sun they dry before being weighted in a plenty of large sacks and transported to the factory by train or lorry where they rosted in an oven at a high temperature of around 350 degrees Celsius. Subsequently, the beans are crushed into tiny pieces while the shell are removed by crusher. Finally, the inner parts are pressed to liquid chocolate.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
. Cacaos trees are grown
 in America Africa Indonesia are grown
 until the ripe red pods This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 out. Next
, the pods are harvested
 and split to collect the white cacao beans by Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "special equipment".special equipment
a special equipment
. Then the beans are fermented
 among a number of layers from banana This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departs
leaves
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
being spread
 on a mat which is placed
 under the sun they dry This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
being weighted
 in a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
plenty
 of large sacks and transported to the factory by train or lorry where they Possible spelling mistake found.hostedpostedrosterrestedrootedrouted
rosted
 in an oven at a high temperature of around 350 degrees Celsius. Subsequently
, the beans are crushed
 into tiny pieces while the shell are removed
 by crusher. Finally
, the inner parts are pressed
 to liquid chocolate. 