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DESCRIPTION A PERSON WITH A LOT OF AFFECT ON YOU

DESCRIPTION A PERSON WITH A LOT OF AFFECT ON YOU G3dYj
The person who has the most influence on me is my mother. My mother is over 30 years old, but she still looks very young. Mom is not very tall. Full body figure. The mother's figure is that of a woman who has passed her twenties, has gone through many hard years. It has kept the mother's hair a chestnut colour, looking very young and dynamic. The hair is neatly curled, suitable for the mother's face. The mother's skin is not white but very good looking. Therefore, at work, almost everyone loves their mother. The mother's facial expression is very harmonious. From the first time we met, Dad was attracted by his mother's sparkling eyes. With bushy eyebrows, the mother is very personality and strong. Along with that are large, black eyes that seem to contain many things to say, always looking at their cubs with affection and love. Thick, crimson lips are always smiling, revealing white, straight teeth. Also can't forget the calloused hands, taught me the first handwriting, guided me to take the first step in life. With my family, my mother always cared for, shared joy and sorrow with everyone. When the child is sick, the mother is the doctor. When the children study, the mother is the teacher. Many times, my children made mistakes, not only did my mother not scold me, but my mother taught me gently so that I gradually understood. Normally, mother dresses simply but still exudes inherent elegance. Although my family is not rich, my mother still creates conditions for me with friends. I love her very much and I will always take care of her until old age.
The person who has the most influence on me is my
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. My
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is over 30 years
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old
,
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but
she
still
looks
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very
young. Mom is not
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very
tall. Full body figure. The
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mother's
figure is that of a woman who has passed her twenties, has gone through
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many
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hard
years. It has
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kept
the
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mother's
hair a chestnut
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colour
, looking
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very
young and dynamic. The hair is
neatly
curled, suitable for the
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mother's
face. The
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mother's
skin is not white
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but
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very
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
good looking
.
Therefore
, at work, almost everyone
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loves
their
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mother
. The
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mother's
facial expression is
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very
harmonious. From the
first
time we met, Dad
was attracted
by his
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mother's
sparkling eyes. With bushy eyebrows, the
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mother
is
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very
personality and strong. Along with that are large, black eyes that seem to contain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
things to say, always looking at their cubs with affection and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
. Thick, crimson lips are always smiling, revealing white, straight teeth.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
can't forget the calloused hands, taught me the
first
handwriting, guided me to take the
first
step in life. With my family, my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
always cared for, shared joy and sorrow with everyone. When the child is sick, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
is the doctor. When the children study, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
is the teacher.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
times, my children made mistakes, not
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only
did my
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mother
not scold me,
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but
my
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mother
taught me
gently
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so
that I
gradually
understood.
Normally
,
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mother
dresses
simply
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but
still
exudes inherent elegance. Although my family is not rich, my
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mother
still
creates conditions for me with friends. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
her
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very
much and I will always take care of her until
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old
age.
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IELTS essay DESCRIPTION A PERSON WITH A LOT OF AFFECT ON YOU

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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