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I have a plan to buy a hairdryer. My freind's birthday is close and I am going to buy it for her. As you know there are different types of hair dryers for different hair types. I think one of the key factors to consider is hair types. My friend has thin and flat hair. So, choosing a ceramic hair dryer is the best option. Another point that I should pay attention is wattage. Hair dryers with a really high wattage are great because they dry your hair quickly. I think 2000 watts should be enough, and about last factor it should be pink. Because it's my friend's favorite color. The model that I have in mind would require a good amount of money. Of course I saw the same model in several online stores that were cheaper, but I prefer to buy from reliable store.
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a hairdryer. My
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I am going to
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it for her. As you know there are
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different
types of
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dryers for
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types. I
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one of the key factors to consider is
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types. My friend has thin and flat
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hair
.
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So
, choosing a ceramic
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hair
dryer is the best option. Another point that I should pay attention is wattage.
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Hair
dryers with a
really
high wattage are great
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because
they dry your
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hair
quickly
. I
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think
2000 watts should be
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enough
, and about last factor it should be pink.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
it's my friend's favorite color. The model that I have in mind would require a
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good
amount of money. Of
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course I
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saw
the same model in several online stores that were cheaper,
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but
I prefer to
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buy
from reliable store.
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IELTS essay descrie an electronic device that you want t buy it in future.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
146 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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