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DESCRIBE THE PLACE IN WHICH YOU WANT TO STAY WITH YOUR LOVER – RW B2

DESCRIBE THE PLACE IN WHICH YOU WANT TO STAY WITH YOUR LOVER – RW B2 NwMKN
No one can live without love; When we love someone passionately, we all hope that we will stay close to that person throughout our entire life. An ideal house is an indispensable condition of fulfilling that ambition. Most people are in favour of living in a grand villa in the centre of a modernized city, but I take satisfaction in abiding with my constant lover in a peaceful house far away from city life, notwithstanding. My dream house should be a high-tech house located adjacent to the sea or on a high mountain far away from hometowns and residential areas. It’s a two-floor house basically made of glass, metal, and wood that is spacious enough to arrange rooms and corridors. Furthermore, the house may be south-faced so as to be properly ventilated and take advantage of the sunlight. Besides, the south-faced house should possess many clear tempered insulated glass doors and windows, which helps the house get more natural light and wind supplies without making it hot. Additionally, by the house just to the right is a swimming pool where we will have candlelit dinners in bright moonlight. Moreover, my house must be equipped with a wide range of household appliances which are all solar-generated. Not only is my house satisfying with advanced technology, but it also provides me with a relaxed atmosphere in my lush garden. In front of my house is a wide concrete yard. Next to the yard is a pretty garden. In my garden, I plant a variety of brilliantly coloured flowers such as moss rose, confetti, forget me not, . . . , which makes my house dreamy and otherworldly. Besides, surrounding the house, along the climbing rose-covered fence stand rows of fruit trees such as mango, plum, jackfruit, . . . Furthermore, behind a high well-built gate is a large kennel of house guard dogs where my domestic dogs carry out the duty of watching the house. Generally, I intend to live with my beloved in such a house because of its benefits and my hobby. It is a cosy home for us to live and enjoy the whole life together. We need a large house with a diverse range of household appliances to enjoy our daily life and occupation the most. Also, we need an undisturbed space with a green atmosphere to relax after stressful working processes. Such the combined house is the most desired place in which my lover and I are fond of living.
No one can
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live
without
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love
; When we
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love
someone
passionately
, we all hope that we will stay close to that person throughout our entire
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life
. An ideal
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house
is an indispensable condition of fulfilling that ambition. Most
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people
are in
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favour
of living in a grand villa in the
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centre
of a modernized city,
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but
I take satisfaction in abiding with my constant lover in a peaceful
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house
far away from city
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life
, notwithstanding.

My dream
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house
should be a high-tech
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house
located adjacent to the sea or on a high mountain far away from hometowns and residential areas. It’s a two-floor
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house
basically
made of glass, metal, and wood
that is
spacious
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enough
to arrange rooms and corridors.
Furthermore
, the
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house
may be south-faced
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so as to
be
properly
ventilated and take advantage of the sunlight.
Besides
, the south-faced
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house
should possess
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many
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clear
tempered insulated glass doors and windows, which
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helps
the
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house
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get
more natural light and wind supplies without making it hot.
Additionally
, by the
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house
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just
to the right is a swimming pool where we will have candlelit dinners in bright moonlight.
Moreover
, my
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house
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must
be equipped
with a wide range of household appliances which are all solar-generated.

Not
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only
is my
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house
satisfying with advanced technology,
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but
it
also
provides me with a relaxed atmosphere in my lush garden. In front of my
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house
is a wide concrete yard.
Next
to the yard is a pretty garden. In my garden, I plant a variety of
brilliantly
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coloured
flowers such as moss rose, confetti,
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forget me not
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, .
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.
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.
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,
which
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makes
my
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house
dreamy and
otherworldly
.
Besides
, surrounding the
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house
, along the climbing rose-covered fence stand rows of fruit trees such as mango, plum,
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jackfruit
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, .
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.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
Furthermore
, behind a high well-built gate is a large kennel of
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house
guard dogs where my domestic dogs carry out the duty of watching the
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house
.

Generally
, I intend to
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live
with my beloved in such a
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house
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because
of its benefits and my hobby. It is a
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cosy
home for us to
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live
and enjoy the whole
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life
together. We need a large
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house
with a diverse range of household appliances to enjoy our daily
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life
and occupation the most.
Also
, we need an undisturbed space with a green atmosphere to relax after stressful working processes. Such the combined
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house
is the most desired place in which my lover and I are fond of living.
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IELTS essay DESCRIBE THE PLACE IN WHICH YOU WANT TO STAY WITH YOUR LOVER – RW B2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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