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Describe the first/last time you did something important.

Describe the first/last time you did something important. KnXPN
Everyone has their own unforgettable memories in life. And me too, I also had fond memories for myself. But the memory that I miss the most is the memory of my first day at primary school. The night before I went to school, I went to bed early but I can not sleep because I very nervous. The visions of tomorrow at school flashed in my hind. I will meet new friends, new teacher. And that morning, I got up early, it’s not like when I have to go to kindergarten. I had a strange feeling of excitement
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in life. And me too, I
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for myself.
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that I miss the most is the
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of my
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I went to school, I went to bed early
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nervous. The visions of tomorrow at school flashed in my hind. I will
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meet
new friends, new teacher. And that morning, I
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up early, it’s not like when I
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go to kindergarten. I had a strange feeling of
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excitement

IELTS essay Describe the first/last time you did something important.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
97 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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