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Describe the characteristics of a good teacher. Please state with specificexamples and details. v.1

Describe the characteristics of a good teacher. Please state with specificexamples and details. v. 1
It is true that the prevalence of advanced technologies have fundamentally transformed the whole world. While some people opine that early technological developments have far more beneficial effects on people’s life than the recent ones, I completely disagree with this point of view, because both of those have equal significant impacts on our lives. On the one hand, many early technological devices have helped people and changed the way we live. The invention of printing, for example, has had a profound impact on the way we impart knowledge to the next generation. The printing press allows books and newsletters to be mass-produced, which means that more individuals could gain access to these information sources. The telephone was another early scientific breakthrough that has revolutionized and facilitated current methods of communication. From this, people can interact with each other in a far-flung place regardless of the geographical barrier. Finally, technological advances have led to new forms of transport, such as cars, trains and planes, which have completely changed the way we commute from home to workplace and trade goods. On the other hand, I contend that recently cutting-edge technology also ushers in some merits to our life. Firstly, the presence of computer and the Internet enables individuals to shop online conveniently, which makes human life definitely more convenient. With only a click of the mouse, it is possible to purchase merchandise such as clothes and daily necessities without even leaving our comfortable home. In addition, as to space technology, the advent of space shuttles assists astronauts in carrying out space exploration programmes, which can broaden human’s horizons about not only terrestrial planets but also extraterrestrial lives on earth, such as supernovas or black holes. In conclusion, while people can reap a variety of powerful effects from the early technological advancements, I do not believe that they can totally outweigh the recent ones.
It is true that the prevalence of advanced technologies have
fundamentally
transformed the whole world. While
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some
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opine that
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early
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technological
developments have far more beneficial effects on
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people’s
life than the recent
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ones
, I completely disagree with this point of view,
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because
both of those have equal significant impacts on our
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lives
.

On the one hand,
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many
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early
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technological
devices have
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helped
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people
and
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changed
the way we
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live
. The invention of printing,
for example
, has had a profound impact on the way we impart knowledge to the
next
generation. The printing press
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allows
books and newsletters to be mass-produced, which means that more individuals could gain access to these information sources.
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The
telephone was another
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early
scientific breakthrough that has revolutionized and facilitated
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current
methods of communication. From this,
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people
can interact with each other in a far-flung place regardless of the geographical barrier.
Finally
,
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technological
advances have led to new forms of transport, such as cars, trains and
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planes
, which have completely
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changed
the way we commute from home to workplace and trade
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goods
.

On the other hand
, I contend that recently cutting-edge technology
also
ushers in
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some
merits to our life.
Firstly
, the presence of computer and the Internet enables individuals to shop online
conveniently
, which
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makes
human life definitely more convenient. With
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only
a click of the mouse, it is possible to
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purchase
merchandise such as clothes and daily necessities without even leaving our comfortable home.
In addition
, as to space technology, the advent of space shuttles assists astronauts in carrying out space exploration
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programmes
, which can broaden
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human’s horizons
about not
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only
terrestrial planets
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but
also
extraterrestrial
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lives
on earth, such as supernovas or black holes.

In conclusion
, while
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people
can reap a variety of powerful effects from the
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early
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technological
advancements, I do not believe that they can
totally
outweigh the recent
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ones
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe the characteristics of a good teacher. Please state with specificexamples and details. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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