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Name one movie you like. Why do you like it? Include details and examples to support your explanation. v.1

Name one movie you like. Why do you like it? Include details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
More and more people in a number of countries in the West shift towards the childfree family scheme. The following paragraphs will examine possible benefits and demerits of such a choice, like decreased life quality during elderly. One evident benefit of having no children is the possibility for couples to focus on their career. From the time being born and up until adolescence children require constant dedication. Childfree way of starting a family dismisses a couple from such a dedication thus enables them to completely focus on their careers. According to statistics, families that have chosen not to have children are more likely to succeed in reaching career heights. Furthermore, countries might also benefit from such a scenario. Since people are focused on their work, this positively impacts the overall economic growth of a country. However, the option to have no children seem to have considerable disadvantages. Firstly, the quality of life in the elderhood might be decreased, since there will be no close family members, like sons or daughters, who could look after an aging couple. Secondly, such families often experience depression and feel down, because there are no other family members to interact with. Finally, children are considered to tie a couple even stronger, which makes a family more resilient to various tough life circumstances. In other words, childless couples tend to break up more often as compared to those having children. Statistically, childless couples less often enforce their relations through official marriage and inclined to break up. To conclude, even though couples without children have advantages, like the possibility to pursue their career paths, there are also drawbacks of such an approach, such as poor quality of life in elderly and high risks to break up.
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in a number of countries in the West shift towards the
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childfree
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family
scheme. The following paragraphs will examine possible benefits and demerits of such a choice, like decreased
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life
quality during elderly.

One evident benefit of having no
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children
is the possibility for
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couples
to focus on their
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career
. From the time
being born
and up until adolescence
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children
require constant dedication.
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Childfree
way of starting a
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family
dismisses a
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couple
from such a dedication
thus
enables them to completely focus on their
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careers
. According to statistics,
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families
that have chosen not to have
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children
are more likely to succeed in reaching
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career
heights.
Furthermore
, countries might
also
benefit from such a scenario. Since
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people
are focused
on their work, this
positively
impacts the
overall
economic growth of a country.

However
, the option to have no
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children
seem to have considerable disadvantages.
Firstly
, the quality of
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life
in the
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elderhood
might
be decreased
, since there will be no close
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members, like sons or daughters, who could look after an aging
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couple
.
Secondly
, such
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families
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often
experience depression and feel down,
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because
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members to interact with.
Finally
,
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children
are considered
to tie a
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even stronger, which
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makes
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more resilient to various tough
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life
circumstances.
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, childless
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couples
tend to break up more
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often
as compared to those having
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children
.
Statistically
, childless
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less
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enforce their relations through official marriage and inclined to break up.

To conclude
,
even though
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couples
without
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children
have advantages, like the possibility to pursue their
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career
paths, there are
also
drawbacks of such an approach, such as poor quality of
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life
in elderly and high
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risks
to break up.
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IELTS essay Name one movie you like. Why do you like it? Include details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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