Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or

Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or 8dw3x
lots of tourists come to visit Egypt every year espically the pyramids and Egyptian museums which is a very important source of income. Although, tourism could be one the main factors that the economy is affected by, we still have problems with this. In this essay we are going to discuss the advantage and disadvantage of tourism. First of all, Many activities in Egypt is depending on the status of tourism. An entire cities was influenced by the inturruption of tourism in 2011 after the revolution in Egypt. Lots of people lost their own jobs and many factories which are relying on manufacturing of the traditional historical Egyptian accessories stopped their business. the economy had a severe consequences due to the unstable situation of tourism. consequently, Tourism was the most vital source of money for Cairo and still be. On the other hand, everything comes in a price, tourism could be playing an important role in the egyptian economy, However, it also has a bad impact on many aspects. To give a specific example. In the summer, it becomes a little bit harder on the government to handle this numerous number of local and forign tourists. As a result, the whole infrastructure system is influenced in a really bad way. The government has been trying to improve all the public services to solve the problem but still we have so many troubles. To conclude, Despite the fact that tourism have been playing the most important role in the Egyptian economy for so many years but we still have a negative impact as a result of this. All the burden fall on the government to improve all the utilities and the infrastructure.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
lots
of tourists
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to visit Egypt every year
Possible spelling mistake found.
espically
the pyramids and Egyptian museums which is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
source of income. Although,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
could be
Did you mean "one of"?
one
the main factors that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economy
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by, we
still
have problems with this. In this essay we are going to discuss the advantage and disadvantage of tourism.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
activities in Egypt
The verb 'depending' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
is depending
on the status of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
. An entire
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "city"?
cities
was influenced
by the
Possible spelling mistake found.
inturruption
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
in 2011 after the revolution in Egypt. Lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
lost their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
jobs and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
factories which are relying on manufacturing of the traditional historical Egyptian accessories
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
their business.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economy
had a severe consequences due to the unstable situation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
consequently
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Tourism
was the most vital source of money for Cairo and
still
be.

On the other hand
, everything
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
in a price,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
could be playing an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in the
Possible spelling mistake found.
egyptian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economy
,
However
, it
also
has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
aspects. To give a specific example. In the summer, it becomes a
Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".
little bit
harder on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to handle this numerous number of local and
Possible spelling mistake found.
forign
tourists.
As a result
, the whole infrastructure system
is influenced
in a
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
way. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has been trying to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
all the public services to solve the problem
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
we have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
troubles.

To conclude
, Despite the fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
have been playing the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in the Egyptian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economy
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we
still
have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact
as a result
of this. All the burden fall on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
all the utilities and the infrastructure.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts