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Describe some kind of skill that you'd like to learn most. Why? Pleaseinclude specific examples and details in your explanation. v.2

Describe some kind of skill that you'd like to learn most. Why? Pleaseinclude specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 2
Air Transport has seen a boom in recent years. Cheaper flights have caused a surge in air travel over the last decade, which has caused for development in different sectors. In my opinion increase in air travel has brought forward many opportunities and profits for in various fields. To embark upon my view, one can easily see a direct contribution of cheaper air travel on tourism of any place. An increase in tourism leads to rise of local businesses, contributing in the financial growth of the place. Cheaper air travel also acts as a catalyst to import and export of goods which also helps the economy of a country. Other than these bigger impacts, time saving is an obvious benefit. This can be particularly helpful in providing immediate aid in case of disasters and other emergencies. According to statistics, Air travel is the safest of all means of transport. Other the other hand, one can argue, flights have been a constant target of terrorist groups. News on the hijacked flights by terrorist organisations for ransoms and freedom for captive terrorists has not been in the very distant past. The incident of a 9/11 is a dreadful example, when flights were hijacked and used as a weapon which killed so many people. Other than that, some also claim flights cause a disturbance for birds and sometimes even leads to their death. In conclusion, I would like to state, all inventions can be used in the way it pleases us. So, it is up to us how we utilise air travel and how we make it safer. As one cannot deny all the positive effects it has on the economy and public transport.
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Transport has
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seen
a boom in recent years. Cheaper
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flights
have caused a surge in
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air
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travel
over the last decade, which has caused for development in
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different
sectors. In my opinion increase in
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air
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travel
has brought forward
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many
opportunities and profits for in various fields.

To embark upon my view, one can
easily
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see
a direct contribution of cheaper
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air
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travel
on tourism of any place. An increase in tourism leads to rise of local businesses, contributing in the financial growth of the place. Cheaper
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air
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travel
also
acts as a catalyst to import and export of
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goods
which
also
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helps
the economy of a country.
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Other
than these bigger impacts, time saving is an obvious benefit. This can be
particularly
helpful in providing immediate aid in case of disasters and
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other
emergencies. According to statistics,
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Air
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travel
is the safest of all means of transport.

Other the
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hand, one can argue,
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flights
have been a constant target of terrorist groups. News on the hijacked
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flights
by terrorist
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organisations
for ransoms and freedom for captive terrorists has not been in the
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very
distant past. The incident of a 9/11 is a dreadful example, when
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flights
were hijacked
and
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used
as a weapon which killed
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so
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many
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people
.
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than that,
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some
also
claim
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flights
cause a disturbance for birds and
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sometimes
even leads to their death.

In conclusion
, I would like to state, all inventions can be
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used
in the way it
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pleases
us.
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So
, it is up to us how we
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utilise
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air
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travel
and how we
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make
it safer. As one cannot deny all the
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positive
effects it has on the economy and public transport.
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IELTS essay Describe some kind of skill that you'd like to learn most. Why? Pleaseinclude specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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