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Describe everything you do and the consequences you is making.

Describe everything you do and the consequences you is making. Wq77K
So far, I have learned quite a few things regarding myself as I will highlight in this essay. First of all, I realized how important my health is. The pandemic was the primary reason for that because it taught me how to value my health and gave birth to the theory that the only person who cares about you is you. As a matter of fact, we all experience d this crisis (covid-19) and the consequences of the problem cost high for us. Anyway, having seen this, we will probably become ready for another issue coming in the future. Also, what I have learned that my health is not only based on the food I eat but also environmental I am in and the individuals I interact with. In addition to this, one lesson my grandfather taught me was about my role in society. According to him, I should have a vital part in community and give a favour to as many people as I can. I think it is quite correct idea for the reason that country will develop and grow if everyone contribute to it. In conclusion, those were the some of the lesson I learnt and they will be useful in my life.
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far, I have learned quite a few things regarding myself as I will highlight in this essay.
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First of all
, I realized how
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important
my health is. The pandemic was the primary reason for that
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because
it taught me how to value my health and gave birth to the theory that the
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only
person who cares about you is you. As a matter of fact, we all experience d this crisis (
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covid-19
) and the consequences of the problem cost high for us. Anyway, having
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seen
this, we will
probably
become ready for another issue coming in the future.
Also
, what I have learned that my health is not
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only
based on the food I eat
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but
also
environmental I am in and the individuals I interact with.
In addition
to this, one lesson my grandfather taught me was about my role in society. According to him, I should have a vital part in community and give a
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favour
to as
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many
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people
as I can. I
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think
it is quite correct
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idea
for the reason that country will develop and grow if everyone
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contribute
to it.
In conclusion
, those were the
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some of the
lesson I
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learnt and
they will be useful in my life.
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IELTS essay Describe everything you do and the consequences you is making.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
206 words
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