Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe an object that is essential in your everyday life.

I’m going to talk about my credit card, which is so important to me. Speaking of how I got it, it was about one year ago when I attended university, my institution required all students to have a bank account. There were so many banks, and I had no idea which bank was better. My father had a bank account at Vietinbank, so I decided to open an account there. I want to talk about my credit card for several reasons. First, it’s much more convenient to bring a card with you instead of cash. If you pay by card, you don’t need to wait for change or prepare change in advance. In addition, with a debit card, you can shop online instead of going to physical stores. Now, with internet banking or a mobile banking account, you can stay at home and shop online for anything you want, which is so convenient and time-saving. Second, it’s easier for you to calculate your spending at the end of the month. You can check your purchases online anytime and anywhere to make sure that you don’t make any unnecessary purchases. Third, in Vietnam, it’s not really safe to carry a large amount of cash around with you. You are at a greater risk of losing your money by pick-pockets or robbers. So, it’s much safer to bring a card. If you need cash, you can easily take out how much you need from an ATM. Now, I bring my card with me everywhere I go. After using it for a while, I learned how to manage my budget more effectively and how to keep track of all the money I spend in a week or month. So, if I had to talk about something I own that is important to me, it would have to be my credit card.
I’m going to talk about my credit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
, which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to me.

Speaking of how I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
it, it was about one year ago when I attended university, my institution required all students to have a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
account
. There were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
banks
, and I had no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
was better. My father had a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
account
at
Possible spelling mistake found.
Vietinbank
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I decided to open an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
account
there.

I want to talk about my credit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
for several reasons.

First
, it’s much more convenient to bring a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
with you
instead
of cash. If you pay by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
, you don’t need to wait for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
or prepare
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in advance.
In addition
, with a debit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
, you can shop online
instead
of going to physical stores.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, with internet banking or a mobile banking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
account
, you can stay at home and shop online for anything you want, which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
convenient and time-saving.

Second, it’s easier for you to calculate your spending at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the month. You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchases
online anytime and anywhere to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that you don’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
any unnecessary
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchases
.

Third, in Vietnam, it’s not
really
safe to carry a large amount of cash around with you. You are at a greater
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of losing your money by pick-pockets or robbers.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, it’s much safer to bring a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
. If you need cash, you can
easily
take out how much you need from an ATM.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, I bring my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
with me everywhere I go. After using it for a while, I learned how to manage my budget more
effectively
and how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
of all the money I spend in a week or month.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, if I had to talk about something I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
that is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to me, it would
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be my credit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Describe an object that is essential in your everyday life.

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts