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I have an inspiring friend. Her name is Hoa. Firstly, like her name, she looks so attractive. She has an oval face, high nose and a pair of sparkling black eyes. Her hair is black - a typical colours of most Asians. She also tall and slim- this is a perfect fit suitable for her face. Secondly, she is humble and helpful. Although having a very good academic record, she has never been arrogant with me and her friends. She always helps me whenever I need her. Besides, she loves take part in charity activities to assist for poor and disable people. To sum up, I really like and pround of her
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, like her name, she looks
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attractive. She has an oval face, high nose and a pair of sparkling black eyes. Her hair is black
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a typical
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colours
of most Asians.
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She
also
tall and slim- this is a perfect fit suitable for her face.
Secondly
, she is humble and helpful. Although having a
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very
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academic record, she has never been arrogant with me and her friends. She always
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helps
me whenever I need her.
Besides
, she
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loves
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take part
in charity activities to assist for poor and disable
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people
. To sum up, I
really
like and
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IELTS essay describe an inspring friend or family member

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
111 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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