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Describe an enjoyable event that you experienced when you were at school

Describe an enjoyable event that you experienced when you were at school nEPqe
The enjoyable moment at school, to everyone school days, is considered as the best days of their life. That day is not forgotten lifetime. They remember the memories for the rest of their life. I also have numerous memories of my school days and I really miss that day very much who fully enjoyable days with friends. Mostly that day when I got caught for school bunking. Recently I have passed my college. Now I am waiting for University admission. I am continuing my study at the University When I sit for studying the University admission materials, But My past days appear before my eyes. I start missing the days When I was twelve and thirteen year age not more than fourteen. There were some other students with me. We had formed a group. All of the group members used to occupy the last benches. Thus we were named as the “backbencher. ” Our class teachers call to backbencher students.
The enjoyable moment at
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school
, to everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "schools", "schooled".
school
days,
is considered
as the best days of their life. That day is not forgotten lifetime. They remember the memories for the rest of their life. I
also
have numerous memories of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
days and I
really
miss that day
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very
much who
fully
enjoyable days with friends.
Mostly
that day when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
caught for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
bunking. Recently I have passed my college.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
I am waiting for University admission. I am continuing my study at the University When I sit for studying the University admission materials,

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But
My past days appear
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before
my eyes. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
missing the days When I was twelve and thirteen year age not more than fourteen. There were
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some
other students with me. We had formed a group.
Consider using "all the".
All of the
group members
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to occupy the last benches.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Thus
we
were named
as the “
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backbencher
. ” Our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
teachers call to
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backbencher
students.

IELTS essay Describe an enjoyable event that you experienced when you were at school

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
160 words
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4.0
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