Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe a useful item you bought recently

Describe a useful item you bought recently KYD36
Now I'd like to tell you about an item I bought recently. That's a new smartphone. To be honest, I lost my phone when I was going to the supermarket on Sunday two weeks ago. So I decided to spend all of my saving money to buy a new one. I bought my phone from the FPT which is highly recommended by my friends. My phone uses the Android operating system. It's just a normal phone so it's not too expensive, around 6 million, Dong. However, it's really useful. I use the phone to keep in touch with my friends and relatives. It allows communicating by voice, text and also email. It has some special features such as connecting to wireless Internet, fast battery charger and unlocking by face or fingerprint. Moreover, it has a large memory, about 64 GBs, so I can download a lot of my favourite songs, videos and games to relax in my free time. Sometimes I use my phone to study online instead of my computer because you know, looking at the screen computer continuously makes our eyes get tired. My phone is an essential part of my life. It helps me wake up early, remind me about appointments and go shopping online easily. My phone is an essential part of my life. I think I couldn't live without it.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
I'd like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you about an item I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
recently. That's a new smartphone. To be honest, I lost my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
when I was going to the supermarket on Sunday two weeks ago.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I decided to spend all of my saving money to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a new one. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
from the FPT which is
highly
recommended by my friends. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
the Android operating system. It's
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
a normal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it's not too expensive, around 6 million, Dong.
However
, it's
really
useful. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in touch with my friends and relatives. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
communicating by voice, text and
also
email. It has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
special features such as connecting to wireless Internet,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
battery charger and unlocking by face or fingerprint.
Moreover
, it has a large memory, about 64
Possible spelling mistake found.
GBs
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I can download
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
my
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
songs, videos and games to relax in my free time.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Sometimes
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
to study online
instead
of my computer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
you know, looking at the screen computer
continuously
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
our eyes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
tired. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
is an essential part of my life. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
me wake up early, remind me about appointments and go shopping online
easily
. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
is an essential part of my life. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
I couldn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
without it.

IELTS essay Describe a useful item you bought recently

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
225 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Describe a useful item you bought recently