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Describe a time when your family member help for something

Here I would like to talk about a time when my sister ask admin for a help to convince our parents because my maternal aunt brought a influential and wonderful marriage proposal for her but she did not get ready for it she wanted to she had another plans because he wanted to go abroad for their higher education such as post graduation and she came to me and said that convince your parents to say no that proposal but I promised that i will help her and I also said that she e go directly with the our parents and told every thing because and what it is it was a difficult task for ask because my parents were really excited that time and after that I asked everything about about marriage proposal my parents was really disappointed with her and and looked up on questionably but I I I took entirely side with her and I also said to my parents that nowadays education is the most important that can women don't like her decision and she crying that time in front of them but my my mother's heart was sinking and she said that we think about it and finally they said no for this that proposal I felt really happy to help my help help my sister because now now she is she is in shifted in abroad and thriving in her life and get a better job.

Here I would like to talk about a time when my sister ask admin for a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadviceuseservicesupportcomforthand
help
 to convince our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 my maternal aunt brought Use “an” instead of ‘a’ if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. ‘an article’, ‘an hour’.an
a
 influential and wonderful marriage You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpropositionmotionovertureoutlineofferbid
proposal
 for her This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 she did not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 ready for Consider adding a comma here.it,
it
 she wanted to she had another plans This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 he wanted to go abroad for their higher education such as post Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).graduation, and
graduation and
 she came to me and said that convince your You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 to say no that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpropositionmotionovertureoutlineofferbid
proposal
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I promised that Did you mean “I”?I
i
 will You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadviceuseservicesupportcomforthand
help
 her and I also
 said that she e go directly
 with A determiner cannot be combined with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply “the” or “our”?theour
the our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informed
told
 every thing This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 and what it is it was a difficult task for ask This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 were really
 excited that time and after that I asked everything Possible typo: you repeated a wordabout
about about
 marriage You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpropositionmotionovertureoutlineofferbid
proposal
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 was really
 disappointed with her Possible typo: you repeated a wordand
and and
 looked up on questionably
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I I I took entirely
 side with her and I also
 said to my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 that nowadays education is the most This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 that can women don't like her decision and A verb seems to be missing. Did you mean “she’s crying”, “she is crying”, or “she was crying”?she's cryingshe is cryingshe was crying
she crying
 that time in front of them This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
Possible typo: you repeated a wordmy
my my
 mother's heart was Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).sinking, and
sinking and
 she said that we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 about it and finally
 they said no for this that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpropositionmotionovertureoutlineofferbid
proposal
 I felt really
 happy to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadviceuseservicesupportcomforthand
help
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadviceuseservicesupportcomforthand
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadviceuseservicesupportcomforthand
help
 my sister This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only “she is”.she is
she is she is
 in shifted in abroad and thriving in her life and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 a better job. 