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Describe a time when the weather caused you to change your plan. v.1

Describe a time when the weather caused you to change your plan. v. 1
Well, I am going to share with you a story of one time when I got up very early. To be honest, getting up early was not really my sort of thing on a regular basis, only on some very special occasions. One such time was during the summer holiday last year. It was our trip to Da Nang with my whole family, which lasted for 5 days. There were lots of things planned ahead, so I did the homework carefully. Because we wanted to avoid rush hours that would probably ruin our whole trip, we had to wake up at 5am to allow time for our careful preparations. It took us 2 hours to get to the airport and fly to Da Nang in the morning. I felt a little bit sleepy because this was the first time I had had to deal with such an early start. However, it promised to be a great time for my extended family to get together, so I was really excited about it. There were 10 of us altogether, and of course we were chatting to each other all the way there. When we arrived, what really attracted me was the fresh air at Da Nang beach. At once, the incredible view totally banished all thoughts of sleep. This amazing trip included many fun times to look back on and it gave all of us a chance to bond with each other. I learnt the hard way that getting up early was as not challenging as I had thought. If I tried my best, I knew that I could do it without too much trouble. For sure, I will make more trips like that in the near future.
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. To be honest, getting up
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special occasions. One such
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was during the summer holiday last year.

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with my whole family, which lasted for 5 days. There were lots of things planned ahead,
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.
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we wanted to avoid rush hours that would
probably
ruin our whole
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trip
, we had to wake up at 5am to
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for our careful preparations. It took us 2 hours to
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to the airport and
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in the morning.

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.
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for my extended family to
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really
attracted me was the fresh air at
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beach. At once, the incredible view
totally
banished all thoughts of sleep.

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included
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to look back on and it gave all of us a chance to bond with each other. I
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way that getting up
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was as not challenging as I had
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. If I tried my best, I knew that I could do it without too much trouble. For sure, I will
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more
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trips
like that in the near future.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a time when the weather caused you to change your plan. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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