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Describe a time when cell phone was not allowed..?

Describe a time when cell phone was not allowed. . ? 9lp5p
Well, today cell phones are so beneficial for everyone. Sometimes it is not allowed in some places like, temples and class room. But, now I would like to talk about one incident when cell phone was not allowed. It was about 2 years ago. I remember when I went for my exam then I forget cell phone was not allowed in classroom. My teacher was so rudely. But, in that time cell phone I really needed. For inform my parents because on that day was my cousin marriage. Lastly, it was worst day for me. I cannot forget this day.
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. It was about 2 years ago.

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in classroom. My teacher was
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rudely
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, in that time
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on that day was my cousin marriage.
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IELTS essay Describe a time when cell phone was not allowed. . ?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
100 words
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