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Describe a thing you bought and you are happy about

Describe a thing you bought and you are happy about W8WEe

actually, I already had a computer to use at first and didn't want to spend too much money on a MacBook. But later on, my old computer was too heavy for me to carry everywhere, it was too inconvenient. Then I asked my friend for advice and complained about the old computer and my friend gave me a suggestion to buy a new computer like Macbook or Dell and so on. And then my friend took his computer to show me and I loved it at first sight. But at that time I didn't want my parents to spend too much money to buy me a new machine and I hesitated for a long time to make a decision. But because in studying I need to use a lot of electronic devices, especially computers, so my mother took me to a reputable computer shop, which must be dozens of kilometers from my house. But when they showed me that MacBook, I was both thrilled and shocked because it was more beautiful than I thought and saw. I agreed with my parents that she buys a handmade instead of a brand new one to save money. That place even promises a 2-year warranty for the computer. When I got home I almost dared not touch it for fear it would scratch. but after all, I've been using it for half a year but I still love and take care of it

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, I already had a computer to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
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 and didn't want to spend too much money on a MacBook. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
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old
 computer was too heavy for me to carry everywhere, it was too inconvenient.

Then I asked my friend for advice and complained about the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 computer and my friend gave me a suggestion to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
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Macbook
 or Dell and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
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show
 me and I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admiredadored
loved
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 sight. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
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buy
 me a new machine and I hesitated for a long time to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a decision.

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But
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because
 in studying I need to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
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a lot of
 electronic devices, especially
 computers, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 my mother took me to a reputable computer shop, which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 be dozens of kilometers from my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
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But
 when they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 me that MacBook, I was both thrilled and shocked This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
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beautiful
 than I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesced
agreed
 with my parents that she This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchases
buys
 a handmade instead
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brand new
 one to save money. That place even promises a 2-year warranty for the computer. When I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
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after all
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but
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love
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