Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe a successful business in your country

Describe a successful business in your country 2Rr1J
Today, I am going to tell you about a successful business in my country. I must say it is a coffee shop and it is so famous there, for example Highland, Trung Nguyen. This business is a kind of sole trader which means a self-employed person who owns and runs their business as an individual. I think that most of people work there are young people, especially students in university. There are a lot of benefits for them to work in a coffee shop like earning money or learning some skills that is helpful for their studying, such as communication skill or time management skill. The reasons that make the coffee shop becomes successful in my country is the people here love to go to the coffee shop. It is a perfect place for them to hang out with their friends or work. Besides that, caffeine coffee can make them feel more comfortable and relax. Moreover, this place is suitable for many kind of people. Not only young people, but also middle-aged one. If I have an opportunity, I will willing to do in the coffee shop because I really like this place. Furthermore, I can also earn money and help my parents to afford the school fee.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
, I am going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you about a successful business in my country. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
say it is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coffee
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
and it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
there,
for example
Highland,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Trung
Nguyen. This business is a kind of sole trader which means a self-employed person who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owns
and runs their business as an individual. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that most of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
work there are young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
,
especially
students in university. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
benefits for them to work in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coffee
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
like earning money or learning
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
that is
helpful for their studying, such as communication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
or time management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
. The reasons that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coffee
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
becomes successful in my country is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
here
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to go to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coffee
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
. It is a perfect place for them to hang out with their friends or work.
Besides
that, caffeine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coffee
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them feel more comfortable and relax.
Moreover
, this place is suitable for
Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: "many kinds".
many kind
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
middle-aged one. If I have an opportunity, I will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "will"
willing
to do in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coffee
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I
really
like this place.
Furthermore
, I can
also
earn money and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
my parents to afford the school fee.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Describe a successful business in your country

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
208 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Describe a successful business in your country