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Describe a resource that helped you to do something better than before. Describe it and explain why it was helpful to you. v.1

Describe a resource that helped you to do something better than before. Describe it and explain why it was helpful to you. v. 1
Firstly, some data may be unverifiable. For example, every time they search for a data, there would be lots of choices that would appear on the screen. They would not be sure if the information they are reading is accurate. Some sources may even have outdated information. Secondly, some sites may be unreliable. For instance, people sign up on one site that sells goods online. The goods would be paid for with a credit card, but the purchaser would not receive anything. And finally, not everything is available through the net. When my friend had tried to research for some pictures of 18th century paintings, he did not find any results. Then he was told by his teacher that they would only be available in the library. Others believe that the Internet is very useful and these are the justifications. Firstly, it is hard to get the same data, that is available through the Internet by other means. For example, if the directory information could not give me the accurate address and contact number of a place I want to visit, I normally check that information on the Internet. In just one click, I would get all the details of that certain company. Secondly, research becomes more comprehensive. For instance, I do not have to buy lots of reading materials to complete my research. Most of the needed information can be found if I have Internet access. And finally, data are easily compared and contrasted. I remember, my cousin researched a study about overweight children a decade ago and at present. He was able to finish his research in just one day, as compared to a week if he would not use the Internet. In conclusion, let me reiterate that the Internet plays a big role in our life, because it makes data retrieval and comparison easier.
Firstly
,
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some
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data
may be unverifiable.
For example
, every time they search for a
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data
, there would be lots of choices that would appear on the screen. They would not be sure if the
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information
they are reading is accurate.
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Some
sources may even have outdated
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information
.
Secondly
,
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some
sites may be unreliable.
For instance
,
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people
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sign
up on one site that sells
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goods
online. The
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goods
would
be paid
for with a credit card,
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but
the purchaser would not receive anything. And
finally
, not everything is available through the net. When my friend had tried to
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research
for
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some
pictures of 18th century paintings, he did not find any results. Then he was
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told
by his teacher that they would
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only
be available in the library.

Others believe that the Internet is
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very
useful and these are the justifications.
Firstly
, it is
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hard
to
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get
the same
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data
,
that is
available through the Internet by other means.
For example
, if the directory
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information
could not give me the accurate address and contact number of a place I want to visit, I
normally
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check
that
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information
on the Internet. In
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just
one click, I would
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get
all the
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details
of that certain
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company
.
Secondly
,
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research
becomes more comprehensive.
For instance
, I do not
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have to
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buy
lots of reading materials to complete my
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research
. Most of the needed
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information
can
be found
if I have Internet access. And
finally
,
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data
are
easily
compared and contrasted. I remember, my cousin researched a study about overweight children a decade ago and at present. He was able to finish his
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research
in
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just
one day, as compared to a week if he would not
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use
the Internet.

In conclusion
,
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let
me reiterate that the Internet plays a
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big
role in our life,
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because
it
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makes
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data
retrieval and comparison easier.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a resource that helped you to do something better than before. Describe it and explain why it was helpful to you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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