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Describe a place you have visited

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Last summer, my parents took me to the zoo. I was very nervous and excited. It's big and crowded but very wide, I could run around without worrying about colliding with anyone, there, I could see many big and interesting animals like an elephant or a giraffe and so on. At the end of the trip, my parents led me to a big cage, and then there were a lot of monkeys jumping out that startled me and they made fun looks, that the most memorable trip of the trip. I hope that my parents will lead me to many another more interesting places
Last summer, my parents took me to the zoo. I was
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nervous and excited. It's
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big
and crowded
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but
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very
wide, I could run around without worrying about colliding with anyone, there, I could
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see
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many
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big
and interesting animals like an elephant or a giraffe and
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on. At the
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of the trip, my parents led me to a
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cage, and then there were
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a lot of
monkeys jumping out that startled
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me and
they made fun looks, that the most memorable trip of the trip. I hope that my parents will lead me to
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many
another more interesting
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places

IELTS essay Describe a place you have visited

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
103 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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